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Intriguing! Can't wait to read more!

This is a nice and intriguing start. You write well, but I did notice some errors, a couple of spelling errors, but also a couple of incorrect word usage. I'll copy and paste the lines to show you: "When prostitution because legal, there was a huge surge in the business," Obviously it should be "became legal". And this: "and any exposure due to this recent turn in events shall not only harm us but the privacy of out clientele." The second last word should be "our" of course. They're only minor things that a careful proofread should pick up, but it's amazing how often we're blind to our own errors, so maybe a beta reader might be something to think about. Anyway, it's a good start so I hope you keep it up!