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December 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Be a bit more aware of grammer, and paragraph seperation. Other then that can't wait for more.
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December 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have no idea why but this was curiously erotic. There was nothing really to this. No plot, no character interaction but, all the same, you got the emotions you what to across to a reader. well done if a little odd.