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for School Boys: On the Bus

by kasin

person Anon
schedule April 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
aw i like it, prob a one-shot tho huh /=
person thePD1
schedule March 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That's..... wrong..... so very wrong... good job.
schedule January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear, I'm almost embarassed to admit this, but this is a really good story. Sometimes it annoys me that the underage/pedo writers are the ones that write the hotter stuff. It's like they can explore the world more of touch and feelings, easier than those who write about adults having sex. It's silly, but that's what I seem to find time after time.

I hate seeing this story so far back, because that tells me it's probably abandoned. Any chance you might continue it anyway? It does leave itself open for much more.
person Anon
schedule January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is quite a fic, I do hope you plan on continuing it.
person reader
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved this. Hope you update.
person geee
schedule November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow
person Friend
schedule November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
man dude ur stories always make my dick so hard ever before i finish the second paragraph and i always enjoy intense climax\'s without ever finish reading the story. Damn man your good.
person Slytherin
schedule November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A really original story. I liked it. My only advice is to add character descriptions. Also, readers didn\'t know the real ages of the boys until further down in the story, so it made it difficult to imagine them. Try using the first couple of paragraphs to decribe your characters. Other than that, the story rocked, and I rated it the highest rating I could give it.
person mjb
schedule November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was great...please hurry and update
person JayDeth[is an author here]
schedule November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O.O *blinks serveral times* O.O Hot, disturbing and surprisingly well written. I give it a 4.