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for A friend in need

by RosesBlack

schedule January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh please do continue. its good so far.
person Sarah
schedule December 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cute
person gg
schedule November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol its a funny start and funny lines like is it big lolbut cool
person B
schedule November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good start but the worst part is your lack of structure in your writing. make paragraphs damnit!!! i got lost so many times trying to read. for example everytime somebody new talks there should be a new paragraph starting with a quotation mark and whatever they say.