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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@3: Ah, sweet crazy love! This is one strange twisted tale of adventure woe and love fantastically intertwined. How on earth does your mind work? This is so intriguing.
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Kale! I\'m so happy you have Kale back in! And their renunion was so sweet...I know that really shouldn\'t describe the meeting of two part demons but...it was. Marzi with his pregnancy and Kale\'s comfort. I fell bad for Kale finding out it\'s not his, but of course it couldn\'t be...oh well.
When Kale says, \"I don’t care if you have all the legions of Heaven and Hell chasing you. All that matters to me is that you’re back in my arms again.” It makes my heart jump. It\'s so perfect, and sweet, and yet true too, cause Marzi\'s always in so much trouble, and Kale\'s there to protect him.
I can\'t wait for your next chapter! This one left me with bubbly excitement and...anxiety! Please update soon!
When Kale says, \"I don’t care if you have all the legions of Heaven and Hell chasing you. All that matters to me is that you’re back in my arms again.” It makes my heart jump. It\'s so perfect, and sweet, and yet true too, cause Marzi\'s always in so much trouble, and Kale\'s there to protect him.
I can\'t wait for your next chapter! This one left me with bubbly excitement and...anxiety! Please update soon!
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November 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
One thing that may be a mistake, I noticed. When God\'s Messenger came in, at the end of his first paragraph of speaking to Pepper, he said this \"Ask your questions\". Did you mean, \"Answer your question.\"?
Though - it could be inferring that he will ask their questions for them and go with him without any fuss. ^-^; Eh, just thought I\'d point it out.
I wonder, this plan he keeps going on about... what exactly is it? Life? The Universe? Everything? Hmm. This will require further thought and reading(of this story ^-^)
The scene where Nicholas gave the girl the candy dispenser was beautiful - though somewhat saddened by the realization that her sister was going to die in a week. At least, they\'ll end on good terms.
This was a great chapter - and it left me thirsting for more.
Though - it could be inferring that he will ask their questions for them and go with him without any fuss. ^-^; Eh, just thought I\'d point it out.
I wonder, this plan he keeps going on about... what exactly is it? Life? The Universe? Everything? Hmm. This will require further thought and reading(of this story ^-^)
The scene where Nicholas gave the girl the candy dispenser was beautiful - though somewhat saddened by the realization that her sister was going to die in a week. At least, they\'ll end on good terms.
This was a great chapter - and it left me thirsting for more.
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November 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oH, i laughed so hard at the first chapter. I like the beginning. I wondered if you were going to do another story regarding the prophecy. And you are. Yay! Please update soon. I want to find out what happens next.
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whee~ I have a feeling Kale will come in soon. :D I missed him. Exciting chapter; you have me worried for a second, but I\'m glad Nicholas didn\'t die. Wonderful as always! (And by the way, it would take much more than mpreg to scare me away. :D!)
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O_O Ah! Evil...er...not angels...evil agents! Ok...so he\'s not evil...but still! Poor Nicholas! They want to steal the baby?? *cry* They can\'t do that! Marzi, Pepper...and where\'s Kale! I miss him! I love Kale...he\'s awesome. Maybe he comes back and helps them somehow? Ok...so I just want him back in the story. *pout* But awesome nonetheless! And that little girl...even not knowing her...I still feel bad for her sister...and her. Your update is terrific as usual. Nicholas\'s extreme protectiveness is perfect, and even though it likely wasn\'t supposed to be funny...the tossing everything in sight...that got a great mental image. *chuckle* Great job! I look forward to more soon! ^_^
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Once again, you have proven that should I ever want to take writing stories seriously, your the first person I\'d go to. I especially liked how you described Nicholas\' \"Brave but futile attempts\". It goes well for the fact he\'s madly in love with Pepper and his future child, and that he\'d do anything to protect them, despite the risks. Still... that so-called \'Agent\' does seem a bit suspicious... I wonder what he\'s REALLY up to...
All this reviewing is inspiring me to write something... I guess it wouldn\'t hurt to take a crack at it. Continue with your impressive writing skills. I shall painstaking await your next update while I smash my fist into something solid yelling \"When is it gonna update already!?\" ^^
Ok, seriously... I\'ll write to pass the time away. Until your next update, Snidne, out.
All this reviewing is inspiring me to write something... I guess it wouldn\'t hurt to take a crack at it. Continue with your impressive writing skills. I shall painstaking await your next update while I smash my fist into something solid yelling \"When is it gonna update already!?\" ^^
Ok, seriously... I\'ll write to pass the time away. Until your next update, Snidne, out.
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@2: *sucks in breath* wow! Candy shops are dangerous places
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November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Before I wrote this, I read through your last two stories. And I got to say, you do have some amazing talent. I swear this should be some kind of book you can sell...
Anyway, your knack for crazy situations never ceases to surprise me! I was hooked onto this Triology when I first decided to see your first of three stories... To do something like that to me, requires the writing skills of an expert, considering I also write a little in my spare time. I rarely give immediate praise to a story, and many times, don\'t give praise to any story at all, simply because I don\'t like to judge someone\'s work as more favorabe then another. But this... this one deserves more then just praise. For what meager words can possibly describe true and utter brillance?
And having said my piece, I await your next update. Don\'t disappoint! ^^
Anyway, your knack for crazy situations never ceases to surprise me! I was hooked onto this Triology when I first decided to see your first of three stories... To do something like that to me, requires the writing skills of an expert, considering I also write a little in my spare time. I rarely give immediate praise to a story, and many times, don\'t give praise to any story at all, simply because I don\'t like to judge someone\'s work as more favorabe then another. But this... this one deserves more then just praise. For what meager words can possibly describe true and utter brillance?
And having said my piece, I await your next update. Don\'t disappoint! ^^
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*laughs* Poor Marzi - that must be very surprising news.
Then again, with everything else that has happened these past two stories, he reacted perfectly.
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...though I do wonder how Kyle will react to the fact that his lover is pregnant.
And I\'m fairly sure Marzi, Nicholas, or Pepper will encounter Kyle at least once in the next 7 months. That is, if it really is two months in.
A great continuation! I can\'t wait to see what happens! ^-^
Then again, with everything else that has happened these past two stories, he reacted perfectly.
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...though I do wonder how Kyle will react to the fact that his lover is pregnant.
And I\'m fairly sure Marzi, Nicholas, or Pepper will encounter Kyle at least once in the next 7 months. That is, if it really is two months in.
A great continuation! I can\'t wait to see what happens! ^-^