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by Gnostic

person Ana
schedule January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh i absolutely loved that. It's wonderful. I think you should make it longer. More details, continue PLEASE :) ... why can't all guys be like Andrew? Oh and this is the first fic i've read for 2006.
person rosetattoo4869
schedule November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed your story. You were able to tell it reaaly well. I encourage you to write more stories like that.
person Arainaina
schedule November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was very interesting I liked it
person BC
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey -- You asked for it. :-)

Overall, I liked it.

Third Person Present is a difficult tense to read, but it does get you right there with them; I don\'t know if that was your intention or it just happened that way...

Personally, in a \'Romance\' story, I\'d like a bit slower pace and a bit more story/character development between sex scenes...but that\'s personal -- it\'s your story.

Keep writing, your imagination and scene setting shine through...and are more than \"good enough.\" Good luck.

BC