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for Breathless

by ranmouri

person PyTerato
schedule November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww poor Yukio-kun. Satoshi is such a jerk. I like them both, lol. I can\'t wait for the next chapter. Will they be getting it on? lol Yes, IN THE GUTTER! That exactly where my mind is. Anyway, I loved it.

~C~
person chi no hana
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, now THAT was interesting!
person anonymous
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Why do people insist on putting a japanese name on their characters?
person PyTerato
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh! Evil Satoshi! I am truly intrigued by this. It is original so far, and yet has sort of a manga feel to it. I absolutely love it. I can\'t wait to see what will come of the poor boy, living with that evil dude. By the way, how much older is Satoshi? ... I hope I\'m spelling his name right.

~C~
person Nefertari
schedule November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, interesting story, sweet character, oh i luv your story. Please write more, i´m so exciting, what will happen next *kyaaaaa*
Thank you for this wonderfull story *bow*
person bambi4real
schedule November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was a great start. the end was abit sinister I can\'t wait to find out what happens next. Keep up the good work.
person Memme
schedule November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooo! At first I thought Satoshi was an all right kinda guy. Now I\'m wondering about him. Eek!