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January 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ok this story is very very short, and rather pointless. For one this isn't a flame this is a word of advice for you to improve %100 I am going to make this long for you.....
1.) This is too short. There is no detail of what is going on, only a setting which seems like it was in school.
2.) No character background. It's not interesting without having to know your characters and it just seems pointless.
3.) No potential what-so-ever. I added it to my recs list thinking that you would edit this but I guess I was wrong.
4.) Don't update this unless you do the whole thing over again....
~Dark~
1.) This is too short. There is no detail of what is going on, only a setting which seems like it was in school.
2.) No character background. It's not interesting without having to know your characters and it just seems pointless.
3.) No potential what-so-ever. I added it to my recs list thinking that you would edit this but I guess I was wrong.
4.) Don't update this unless you do the whole thing over again....
~Dark~