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for Dorian & Rini

by silvercloud

schedule April 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This story is pretty good, the plot so far is interesting, but you might want to look into getting a beta, just to fix up some of your grammar.
person Anon
schedule January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Try getting rid of some of the ~~~~~ at the bottom of your story starting from Chapter three. They make the story difficult to read.
person Anon
schedule November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More please! I like the story very much!
person Kateri_anne_shale
schedule November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t mean to be rude. I really like the idea of your story; however, there are quite a few grammatical errors that make the story difficult to read. Please understand I really like the concept; it\'s a great plot. If you would like someone to proof read and check grammer, I\'d be happy to.
Thanks, keep going!
KaS.
person l\'etje
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going i want to know what will happen next
bye bye
person l\'etje
schedule November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon
bye
person l\'etje
schedule November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon
bye bye
person Crimson Velvet
schedule November 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like the idea of animal people, and you have a way with words...please update often! :)
person Anon
schedule November 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update