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December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i have to admit, i've never had a lemon bar either, which is surprising, given I love lemons! (the fruit, not the other thing...well the other thing too, lol ~_^) This is funny! could you maybe e-mail me when you update? i rarely check this section...thanx!
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hah, mm, lemon bars. -drool- Cute, cute story. I love the stubborn type. ^___^ Love to read more!
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved the first chapter and really like the wit of your writing style...but the sudden POV change in the second chapter totally threw me off and confused me until midway down. I think you're story has great potential, but POV changes like that hardly work. I'd consider rethinking it a bit...you know, if you wanted a bit of constructive criticism haha.
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
haha. Thats a very good start. i love this already. please update soon
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hah, cute. This sounds interesting. I love it when a man is ripped from his business suit and taught how to relax. Mm, yeah. Looking forward to more.
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November 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*L* How CUTE!!! Look forward to the next installment.
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November 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! I like it! The characters seem confident with their personalities, like they know what kind of story they wanna tell and how they wanna tell it. A good start! Got me interested, wanna read more!