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@2: skipped over it. Not interested in where you got your inspiration until I want to know. Probably at the end. So far, not drawn in. You may want to consider withdrawing this chapter and putting it at the end or something. I hate being interrupted. I will now go away and reconsider reading this

Bah! Adult fan fiction doesn\'t have to be all sex! Do it when you think your characters are ready! XD
Sex for no reason is for one timers.

Seriously I didn\'t expect to find good stuff on the fantasy section of this website. I don\'t know why but it was just a feeling. Anyway, I got desperate because I was running out of interesting stuff to read and thought, \'might as well\'. Someone up there must be watching out for me because I found this lovely piece of writing. I planned to review after I read it all but after the chapter when Ceci first found out who Luther was and he proposed and she fainted dead away, I couldn\'t help it, I have to review because that fainting bit was so funny. I also like it a lot that Ceci found out the truth from Luther himself and not, heaven forbid, from someone else or a random glance at a newspaper or magazine by the store. These are so annoying because the heroine usually throws a fit and then have all these \'I am not worthy of him\', \'He lied to me\' or \'He must be playing with me\' kind of stuff. Your way was such a refreshing change that I am really pleased. Thank you for sharing this online. By the way, I never thought the name Luther to be sexy but now I do.

I just submitted my review, went back to the chapter called Revelations and found out that it was the latest chapter. Please update soon!!!

That was an awesome update. I really don\'t feel too bad about the slaughter that happened, they did sort of deserve some type of punishment. I think that was a very romantic proposal, even if the events that lead up to it was sort out of sync. The age thing a little disturbing; like they say, \"age ain\'t nothing but a number.\" Can\'t wait for what happens next.
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I adore it!!! Please update soon

I\'m not confusedyet and i love your story it is really good Can\'t wait. Looks like the the nex chapter is going to be good

It s cute story. You might want to work on your characters a little more. Make seperate notes about each of them. List their likes, dislikes, where they live, what it looks lilke, what they want, etc. And write out every little thing that happend in their lives. It helps keep your characters consistant. You might also want to make sure you are using your words properly. There are a few that did mean what you ment them to mean. I could catch them but some other people may not be able to.

You don\'t have to listen to any of that. Those are just suggestions. But the whole point of this is that I love your story! Keep it up! ^-^

Errr... I can\'t type today. XD I don\'t have much room to talk huh? lol. I mean some of your words didn\'t mean what you meant them too.

OMG no I didn\'t say it was bad! I just meant you wrote stories insted of store in one of your chapters. I was just talking about little mistakes that everyone makes. And your charaters are fine! I was just trying to give you an idea that might help out and make it better. If that is even possible. I am in no way trying to make you feel bad! Please keep writing. ;.;