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Aww He does have some nice in him! I think that they should stay friends. Zip needs some platonic female relationships. It\'ll help him appreciate things more! And maybe vise versa with Sarah =)

I cant help but hate you, you know. You took a premise which I did not (and still don\'t) like and made me want to keep reading. Damn your creative talents! Keep it up... Also, is Sarah supposed to be so moody? I realize that that is part of her trait, but it seems a little over-exaggerated.

Hmm i\'ve never reviewed a story before...so here goes im loving the story maybe even more then original sin and since im a sucker i be upset if zip and sarah don\'t get together......zip is cool i didnt want him messing with eddie and sin but still felt sorry for him and glad he might be happy

hopefully many more good chapters

Relax, there\'s no pressure! There may be high expectations....but no pressure!!

Seriously though, about the story, it\'s really interesting to see how Zip reacts to this situation. He\'s still maintaining some of his cockiness, but he\'s somehow managed to control his raging hormonal tendencies and see the value in becoming friends with Sarah. Zip is showing some encouraging complexity.

Good stuff, Tirch!

forgot to say something i don\'t get why people aren\'t liking sarah or zip aww well update soon hehe

New chapter, new review. I don\'t have the idea of Zip and Sarah together and the fact that you\'re setting it up so that they\'ll TRY to be friends first is a good move though we\'ll see just how long they last before they\'re making out like weasels. I think forbidden relationships is always just one of those things few people actually have the will power to fight and with an insight into Zip\'s thoughts, it\'s obvious that his relationship with Sarah would be most definitely forbidden. But I don\'t see the big deal. So Eddie and Sin would have a problem. So what? It\'s not like they\'re the ones who has to deal with this. They\'re already in a perfect relationship so they should just be the good people everyone knows that they are and let Sarah and Zip try to be happy with one another if that is what is meant to be. Wow. This is a long review and I\'m not even sure what I\'m saying anymore.

Tsk tsk, for shame. Foreshadowing like that is just wrong. And reading this, I dunno, I get the feeling that Sin and Eddie wouldn\'t be too pissed about it, ya know? Yes, Sarah is his little sister, but both he and Sin have expressed a desire for Zip to find his own happiness in life. And Sarah, in all her stupidity, seems to make him happy. I am glad to see that she doesn\'t flatter him in any way, that\'s good. *tosses a chocolate chip cookie* good job!!!

What would be funny (and nice to see) is that Sin and Eddie find out because Joseph figures it out and spills it accidently to lianna.. Lianna then tells S & E what is going on. S & E get pissed because she didn\'t mention it but do not care that she is seeing zip. This would be because Sin would remind Eddie what happened at the end of Original Sin.

I think this story is great so far.
I couldn\'t really stand Zip when he was trying to separate Sin and Eddie but since they\'re off in la-la land, it\'s cool. Plus, I\'d actually like to see where he ends up. Call it wishful thinking but I hope he follows Joseph\'s footsteps. One thing I love about reading these stories is when the bad guy gets a chance to redeem himself. He wanted to be in that place with Sin, so maybe he\'s tired of being a man whore and could settle down with Sarah. Sure, Sarah bitches and moans alot but I think it\'s okay considering that Zip likes \"bitches\" who moan. lolz.. sorry, cheap shot.
Anyways, I think both characters are both immature and need to grow up but that\'s what makes this ride so fun. So far, it seems like they click and I\'d like to see them \"grow up\" together. I think that with everyone\'s objection, they\'re friendship or love (or however you have them), will prevail and have everyone stick their foot in their mouths. That\'s what I\'m hoping and for some reason, I think Sin might be a little more understanding. Well, only one way to know... continue posting. =)
Thanks for posting.

Reviewing chapter 5, I have no negative views or thoughts on any of the characters or plot because I like giving characters a chance to develop more since the story is going to be focused on them. I’m partial to Zip because sometimes he can be an ass but he’s starting to grow on me. But for some reason I like him with faults and the flaws that Zip has makes him real and different from your other male characters. As for Sarah she is still kind of a new character so she still has time to be more developed. Tirch, I have confidence in you and your ability to write, I do. Okay back to actually reviewing this chapter. I really like how conflicted Zip is and what a prev but that’s Ziiiiip, hahaha. Reading the interaction between Zip and Sarah made me think maybe they are good for each other. Zip watches “Desperate Housewives”, hahaha. Zip never cease to amuse me. Three men trying to build a crib, hehehe. I sure had a lot of nothing to say. Thanks for updating.