rate_review Reviews

Don\'t be scared by some of the negativity that people are throwing at you. Not everyone will like the same things. I personally like the story so far. Its different from the other stories that you\'ve written, but its still a good story. I can\'t wait for Lianna and Joseph to have their baby... for some reason it makes me think of a little boy with a mohawk. You know like Angelina Jolie\'s son, Maddox. Just a thought. Keep up the good work.

hmmmm... u know...im thinking this wont be a story wehre zip has to compete with another guy....i think its going to come down to zip/sarah vs..wrath of eddie/sin

Oh damnit;) Oh well, that wont stop me from reading. As long as you keep writing that is;)

I\'ve been following your stories for a few months, and I have to say this one is so far my favourite! You\'ve managed to find a realistic modern day situation of two people that need to keep their relationship a secret, without making it pretensious or absurd. Even though Zip wasn\'t meant to be very likeable in \'Original Sin\' I like how you\'ve found someone for him and didn\'t let him become a cardboard cutout of a villain. I\'m definitely looking forward to more!

Am I the only one who likes Zip? Lol everyone seems to think it\'s a bad idea - the whole Zip and Sarah thing, but I think it\'s brilliant. I\'ve got to say, I\'m a fan of drama and unconventional romances as opposed to fluff and sugar sweet romance. I\'m really enjoying this story and I can\'t wait for more chapters!

I love the chapter. I can\'t wait to read what comes next. i have a feeling its going to be good.

I don\'t think this story is turning scary or anything I mean if Sarah is 20 and Zip is 26 there isn\'t anything really wrong with them dateing if they wanted to... I mean if zip is the only one to make Sarah happy the same as for Zip then they deserve to be happy and Sin and Eddie should be able to see and understand that they truely love each other and know that Zip would never do something as to hurt Sarah.

Oh, really? Good. I mean Zip is a cool name and all, but his real name would be neat to know... lol As for not liking Zip and Sarah\'s characters, I actually like them a lot. I just didn\'t want Zip with Sin. As for Sarah, I can totally relate to her, mostly because she\'s 20 and I\'m going through the same shit that she is. So, goodness all around. Nice job, update soon!

Who\'s got \"NEGATIVE VIEWS\"? I\'ll show \'em up a little, teach them not to mess with the good stuff.
Are you kidding me? Aside from the fact that all your stories so far are really good and in my recommended readings... okay, well there is no \"aside from that\". But don\'t stop this story. PLEASE! I\'M BEGGING, SEE? I\'M BEGGING YOU TO CONTINUE AND NOT GIVE IN TO PEER-ish PRESSURE! ...wait a minute...
ACk, whatever. Please keep it going.
Great work!!

Great story as usual!
Thoughts:
Character development is something that you do very well though you do have your work cut out of you with this one. Yikes!

Zip seems shallow but because you allow us brief glimpses into his mind we can see that he is struggling with new ideas, new wants - prehaps because of what he sees his friends going through w/ their partners. I have great hopes that this new introspective side will be the REAL Zip.

Sarah seems bland and childlike - much along the way that Eddie did and look where you took him! She needs to consider what she wants out of life for the long-term and quit wasting her time - \'floating.\'

For both Sarah and Zip to change they are going to have to learn new behavior - being in love or thinking that you are does not solve the problems of self-centeredness and superficality - which both have in spades - they are actually a lot a like despite their backgrounds. \'Love\' doesn\'t automatically make someone a great person or the prefect boyfriend - love is something you learn not just something that you feel. I wonder what Sarah and Zip are going to have to go through to understand that?

I cannot wait to see where you take the story and I am glad to hear that it may be a bumpy ride to the finish line for Sarah and Zip - sounds a lot like real life to me... Keep up the hard work!