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November 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it!!! I can\'t stop reading. I hope you continue to post more to the story. I really like your characters and the way you portray them seems realy realistic.Also, your writing style is amazing, I can almost imagine being there. I hope the sex turns out to be amazing. Keep going, it is wonderful!
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I wonder exactly where you are going to take this just by reading your endnotes.
You have often said that you tried to make the two main characters unlikable, did I misunderstand? I don\'t find either of them unlikable. While they both have personality quirks.......don\'t we all. Sure Zip has led a colorful life it sounds no different than the stories you hear about many famous stars.....reminds me of the rock stars of the 80\'s. That didn\'t make me like many of them any less.
Sarah has the same problem that many young women with older brothers have. Trying to break free of the \"Baby of the Family\" role that she has been in all her life and assert herself as her own person. While she does seem to accept her brothers help to a point she is beginning to resent his contant interference. How is she able to find herself and define herself if he insists on keeping her in the innocent baby little sister role.
He has been able to move on to the next phase of his life how can he try to hold her back from doing the same thing.
As far as Zip is concerned I have taken from the comments from the manager and his friend Joesph that he is also ready to move on to the next phase of his life. Sure he thought that Sin was to be a part of that but she isn\'t and he is slowly accepting that and looking to move on.
I normally ready Harry Potter fan fiction and my favortie ship is Draco Malfoy and Ginny Weasley. So if I can find hope in that ship I can see where these two could make a go of it if they really want to.
The truth of the matter is that you can take this story any way you want to. I find that I do like the charcters. You have given them personality and depth and while there is the possibility of conflict between Sarah, Sin, Eddie and Zip; there is also the possibility that Sarah and Zip could be good for one another. They could have the beginnings of a wonderful love and romance just as you have developed for Joesph and his wife and Sin and Eddie.
The choice is yours in what direction this goes..........I myself am a sucker for happy endings even if getting there is a bit of a journey, the journey is what life is all about. I\'m just scared that with your warnings that is not in the cards, but I\'ll follow along for now since I have enjoyed the story.
Look forward to your updates.
TTFN
Kelly
You have often said that you tried to make the two main characters unlikable, did I misunderstand? I don\'t find either of them unlikable. While they both have personality quirks.......don\'t we all. Sure Zip has led a colorful life it sounds no different than the stories you hear about many famous stars.....reminds me of the rock stars of the 80\'s. That didn\'t make me like many of them any less.
Sarah has the same problem that many young women with older brothers have. Trying to break free of the \"Baby of the Family\" role that she has been in all her life and assert herself as her own person. While she does seem to accept her brothers help to a point she is beginning to resent his contant interference. How is she able to find herself and define herself if he insists on keeping her in the innocent baby little sister role.
He has been able to move on to the next phase of his life how can he try to hold her back from doing the same thing.
As far as Zip is concerned I have taken from the comments from the manager and his friend Joesph that he is also ready to move on to the next phase of his life. Sure he thought that Sin was to be a part of that but she isn\'t and he is slowly accepting that and looking to move on.
I normally ready Harry Potter fan fiction and my favortie ship is Draco Malfoy and Ginny Weasley. So if I can find hope in that ship I can see where these two could make a go of it if they really want to.
The truth of the matter is that you can take this story any way you want to. I find that I do like the charcters. You have given them personality and depth and while there is the possibility of conflict between Sarah, Sin, Eddie and Zip; there is also the possibility that Sarah and Zip could be good for one another. They could have the beginnings of a wonderful love and romance just as you have developed for Joesph and his wife and Sin and Eddie.
The choice is yours in what direction this goes..........I myself am a sucker for happy endings even if getting there is a bit of a journey, the journey is what life is all about. I\'m just scared that with your warnings that is not in the cards, but I\'ll follow along for now since I have enjoyed the story.
Look forward to your updates.
TTFN
Kelly
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m really liking this one so far too. I think it\'s interesting to see main characters (Sin and Ed in this case) as side characters. Also, as obvious as it probably was, for some reason I wasn\'t expecting Zip to be a main one this time around.
I also have to say great job with Original Sin. I unfortunately wasn\'t around at the time when it ended to review on it there.
I also have to say great job with Original Sin. I unfortunately wasn\'t around at the time when it ended to review on it there.
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Don\'t doubt yourself, you are doing fine. Your stories are always great, and i really love where you\'re going with this.
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey
good story i luv it ;))
update soon!!!!
lg yuri
good story i luv it ;))
update soon!!!!
lg yuri
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uh-oh... They\'re being very, very bad. I think Zip needs a spanking... lol ;o) Nice chapter; the more I learn about Sarah and Zip, the more I think that they are perfect for one another.
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m wondering if Sarah can sing...
But even if not I like her taming (and being tamed) by Zip. Just because he was Sin\'s jerk doesn\'t mean he\'ll be Sarah\'s. Everybody\'s the hero of their own story...
But even if not I like her taming (and being tamed) by Zip. Just because he was Sin\'s jerk doesn\'t mean he\'ll be Sarah\'s. Everybody\'s the hero of their own story...
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just stick to what you want to do with this story. If it\'s how you feel things should go, don\'t feel the need to change things because some people don\'t like where things are going. Sure, probably the majority of the reviewers may be a bit unsure of where the plot is going, but they might be pleasantly surprised with how things turn out. You\'re a fantastic writer and I\'m sure you\'ll keep us hooked. Just remember the minority aswell :P Loving this story so much btw!
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November 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Funny. Zip\'s conversation\'s to himself crack me up. Great job and continue the good work. please update soon.
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November 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi. I was just wondering if you could do me a favour? Please dont give away any plot of desperate housewives. I think we are far behind the States (we are still midway through season one). I mean maybe you werent going to say more than what you had. Now I am just babling. Great chapter. Update soon.