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November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m sitting here giggling because Zip is acting like such a......MAN!!!!
There he is with a tart hanging off his arm and he is acting all hurt because he thinks that Sarah has done something with this guy who is just her friend. You can\'t much more MAN than that.
Reminds me of an old country song.....\"ya can\'t live with\'em and you just can\'t shoot\'em....MEN\"
Great chapter and I think it\'s flowing just fine......ignore all others!!!!!!
TTFN
Kelly
There he is with a tart hanging off his arm and he is acting all hurt because he thinks that Sarah has done something with this guy who is just her friend. You can\'t much more MAN than that.
Reminds me of an old country song.....\"ya can\'t live with\'em and you just can\'t shoot\'em....MEN\"
Great chapter and I think it\'s flowing just fine......ignore all others!!!!!!
TTFN
Kelly
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November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If anything its a little loose but nothing else. I love it keep up dating and soon!! :-)
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
if you only knew how happy it made me to see that your story updated. I always get so sad when it ends.
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is a twist, u know? instead of zip battling and competing with another guy hes battling with himself, sigh it looks like zip(no other outside forces) as of now is the only threat to zip/sarah relationship. but i know that will change....i think the most interesting part....is when sin and eddie find out and zip just breaks and feels guilty, should be interesting
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent stuff - I like the way you show all the different layers and facets of their personalities. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NOOOOO- they kissed :(....no no no no...what\'s happening..... :( - I really hope they become just friends because ...no....this is just....too weird... :*(
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
..i must add...funny though..i\'m starting to like Zip more and more as each chapter is added on...but i keep disliking that....that ...little....wench....more and more as well....I really hope Eddie and Sin find out so they could like..i dunno-- get really REALLY mad at her and not talk to her anymore- seriously- she\'s really....AHHH- I don\'t even have words to describe how much I dislike this girl!!! Now you know you\'re a great author when you can illicit such feelings from your readers!!!! :)
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww. That internal turmoil sux!
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing chapter 7, after kissing Sarah, Zip threw her out, uh... no comment. The man’s sanity is slowly deteriorating from having this secret rendez-vous and he’s becoming Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. Tirch, I don’t know how you manage to make every chapter funny and of course there were serious moments but it’s harder to be funny than serious if that makes sense. Zip’s past does explain his lack of emotional attachment. Another good chapter and thanks for updating.
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Haha! Sorry, but I\'m already hired. (of course, that\'s more of a minion-bodyguard thing..)
That was an interesting chapter, strange-ish.
Still, keep up the great work!!
That was an interesting chapter, strange-ish.
Still, keep up the great work!!