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That chapter was pretty funny. Zip is still the biggest asshole but you can tell that the whole concept of \"love\" is really new to him and it\'s probably affecting his brain more than any drug will.
You\'d figure he\'d learn something from trying to start something with Sin but I tend to forget that Sin never really gave him a chance like Sarah did. He was waiting for that opportunity from her but it wasn\'t half the chance that Sarah gave him. lolz.. and sleeping with Carmen for revenge? What an ass!
Thanks for posting.

Awesome. i loved it! Please update soon!

Reviewing chapter 10, when I read the title of this chapter I was like what? But I got it. Oh my goodness, Zip just revealed his real name to Sarah and we all know what that means, yep its official for them. I can\'t wait to hear Zip actually say I have a girlfriend and I just can’t see Eddie and Zip in a duel because Zip has taken Sarah’s innocence, nope I just can\'t. How will their friends and family find out and what will be their reaction. I can\'t wait to find out but at least let the couple be happy for a while before drama knocks on their door. Very good as always and thanks for updating.

Put simply enough, that chapter was amazing. I felt butterflies in my stomach from the intensity of it all and I just really hope things work out for them. True, they have Sin and Eddie to deal with, which I think is kind of a stupid reason for Zip and Sarah to not be together in the first place, but now that they\'ve shared something like that, which was obviously so much more than sex, they just have to keep their eyes open and realize that them being together is a good thing.

oh awsome work... please update again soon I\'m sort of curious to see what zip is going to say to sarah now??

One more thing. Thanks for sticking up for me.

FINALLY! It\'s about time Zip came to his senses :D This is a short review, cause I don\'t really have much to say, but I wanted to let you know that I enjoyed that last chapter, and I like the direction this story\'s going in :) More, please?

this was a great chapter I\'m glade sarah and zip finally got together.... anyway awsome chapter please continue soon

Review of the last two chapters:
First off, good job. I liked Sarah standing up for herself and at least playing along that she had a relationship with Zip. It showed some maturity. It was nice to see her development with her brother too, as he seemed to disappear.
Next... I dont like the last chapter. Not because it was poorly written, by any means. I just think that that move was too fast, and I dont think either of those two were ready for that yet. Maybe that is your intention, I dont know, but I was hoping for a little more... bonding before that. Also, that whole scene seemed to center on Zip, and I would have liked to see it a little more through Sarah\'s eyes. After all, she hadnt done any of that before but she just seemed to kind of nod and go along.
Finally... keep writing. Youre a little bit above an amateur writer, so give yourself some credit, damnit! And yes, that is a command.

Reviewing chapter 9, I have this love and hate thing for Zip. But at the same time I can’t hate the guy when he is just being real. Zip better not go down without a fight and I got his back, hehe. I have finally decided that I like Sarah because she is the side that we don’t really mention of ourselves. Whether it’s good or bad I see myself in her. When Joseph and Zip have their male bonding talk I find their conversations humorous. Don’t let Broken Dynamite break up. Your author’s note was so sweet Tirch and your cool like that. I’m excited of the prospect of the next chapter. Thanks for updating.