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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
\'Good looking?\' That soooooo suits him... lol This was such a sweet chapter. I love that we\'re starting to see the softer side of Zip now, but you\'re still keeping that \'edge\' he has. He\'s such a real character. Someone people can relate to. I didn\'t use to care for him much, but I think it\'s mostly because I didn\'t know a lot about him other than the fact that he was a player. I think he needed someone like Sarah to open him up. Anyway, enough rambling, and I\'m glad I didn\'t offend you. Good luck with the next chapter!
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Amazing chapter. It was so beautiful and Zip and Sarah are in the stage of relationships I love- the beginning part when everything seems perfect and they can\'t get enough of one another. Where moments spent not touching one another feel like torture. Zip is being so incredibly sweet and I don\'t blame them for thinking it is a dream. That was almost too perfect. And knowing you, you won\'t let them last for them because where\'s the fun in that? Seriously, though Tirch. That was just absolutely beautiful and pretty perfect.
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I was away for internet for a couple of days, so catching up with this story has been a reall pleasure.
It is probably one of your best so far. Zip finally welcomed her behind his walls. They seem to finally be happy together. but now I\'m a little bit worried about the outside world.
Also I know you said Eddie and Sin would surprise us, but can you at least have Eddie freak out for a little bit, please?
It is probably one of your best so far. Zip finally welcomed her behind his walls. They seem to finally be happy together. but now I\'m a little bit worried about the outside world.
Also I know you said Eddie and Sin would surprise us, but can you at least have Eddie freak out for a little bit, please?
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Man I laughed out loud when Zip said he had to listen to her pee.... That was priceless. Very steamy chapter. Impressed as always. I am glad to see this side of Zip. Your characters are always so alive. I envy the way you can bring them to life. Lets just say you make it look so easy......when I know its not. Anyway I can\'t wait for the next chapter. Sin and Eddie are going to shit a brick....... I can\'t wait
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well that was a little unexpected, but deffinitely like your portrail of them. Now that they are finally \"together\" I think it is time to see if they will stay so... Will Eddie and Sin find out? Who will live? Who will die? That is the question(s). Until next time.
P.S when I said live/die I meant will eddie and sin want to kill those two..
P.S when I said live/die I meant will eddie and sin want to kill those two..
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay... another wonderful chapter please update again soon
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another good chapter, though I would have liked to see a little more thought about what they were doing, as noted in the last chapter. I also would have liked Ava to note just how Sarah looked... and probably smelled... she seems the kind of person that would pick up on that. Oh well, next chapter please:-)
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is great! (Guess I\'ll have to read \"Original Sin\" and the others now, too--it\'s totally your fault if I don\'t finish \"The Rainbow\" tonight...if only you weren\'t more interesting than Lawrence...)
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Sniff Sniff* I love this story...you are a god...i\'m not worthy...
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Now that we are finally here I withdraw my comment about you dragging it out. Now that finally something happened the story seems to be progressing and so will their relationship. (Unless he is that much of a moron...)