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for Love at your service

by Albapro

person iotc247
schedule November 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just a suggestion: Some of your sentences seem to be more of statement rather then a command or something to shout about. You do seem to use alot of exclimation marks.. Maybe it is just be but well it is how I saw it. Other then that after reading all 8 chapters straight I do hope that you update soon.
person Debi
schedule October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Where is the rest of the dang story. I was really getting into it and it left me hanging. UGH!
person Michiru Kaiou
schedule October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh! I like it, good character development, etc... can\'t wait for an update :)
person LKN
schedule October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hope Ben doesn\'t see them and misconstrue everything as a case of deja vu. Sigh.... such a strong attraction between the two already but so many forces driving them apart. Funny how they barely met and now might be forever bound if she\'s pregnant. Can\'t wait for next chapter.
person Arainaina
schedule October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
again very good please update again soon
person LKN
schedule October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So what, she works for him now. It wasn\'t like he interviewed her and gave her the job. And she might be pregnant too? What luck she has.
He\'s lucky she slapped him. If that was me, I\'d kick him where the sun don\'t shine. What an asshole. Thanks for the update.
person kc
schedule October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
just found your story and it great..can\'t wait to see where this goes
person Arainaina
schedule October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh the suspense.... please update again soon. For what Jess said was true, Ben had not mentioned his last name to her and if he did I\'m sure she wouldn\'t have \"fooled\" around with him that night so he can\'t be mad at her for that. But anyways very good please update soon
person Anon
schedule October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good good good. i can\'t wait to read more.
person rosie
schedule October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heheheheh- she\'s PREGNANT!!!!!!!!