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sorry this has very little to do wit ur story (it was good) but what does dyke mean.....my brother calles me that all the time and when ever i ask someone what it means, they either, A) look at me oddly, b)laugh (this is mosty my fathers or brothers reaction) or, c) frown and complain about how im smarter than them and if i realy wanna know i should look it up in the dictionsry. (its not in there)

kinda sucked

Sorry, but this story does nothing. There is no description whatsoever. All dialogue does not make a good story. You also jump from her more or less fighting him to giving in. What changed her mind? Why does she go from calling him a pervert to sir. That does not make sense. This could be a good story, but it needs work.