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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a gorgeous chapter! I love how their roles have been reversed.. how Rye can talk so well and Ichi is the one who is stumbling. And Rye is the one who is in charge while Ichi is trying hard to just meekly hold it together. That\'s a really nice shift in your story!
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A great read; can\'t wait for more! You write fabulously.
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Great! Amazing! Awe - inspiring! And so on and so on until your self esteem can no longer be boosted anymore!
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I love this story... your writing is so realistic. I mean, it\'s sci fi (I think), but the actual characters and situations are things that people can relate to (though with the situations in a much lesser degree). You should really think about submitting a story to some publishers. Though I guess that could be hard on you, what with the rejection problems, but as a writer it\'s something you have to accept. Constructive criticism, glaring editors, and asshole publishers are normal happenings. But anyways... I still think you should!
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Write again soon! -Fury
- P.s. I know it was going to be longer... sorry! Maybe next time? I thought it was pretty long...
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I love this story... your writing is so realistic. I mean, it\'s sci fi (I think), but the actual characters and situations are things that people can relate to (though with the situations in a much lesser degree). You should really think about submitting a story to some publishers. Though I guess that could be hard on you, what with the rejection problems, but as a writer it\'s something you have to accept. Constructive criticism, glaring editors, and asshole publishers are normal happenings. But anyways... I still think you should!
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Write again soon! -Fury
- P.s. I know it was going to be longer... sorry! Maybe next time? I thought it was pretty long...
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, oh man, this is hot. And wow! It has a plot! Not something too often seen on this site. This is an amazing story, and I feel like I can connect deeply with the characters. And the detail you use...wow. It leaves me speechless. I can\'t wait for more!
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMFG!!! EBIL!!!! you left it on a cliffhanger ;_;.. but.. wow... HOT HOT HOT
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was just what i needed on such a horrible cold day:)
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a switch.... Rye and Ichi, trading places when it comes to all of this. But then, there were those subtle hints of it earlier..
Beautiful!!! Can\'t wait for more!
Beautiful!!! Can\'t wait for more!
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Phew! I thought they were going to regress and have to start building up their relationship again, but I\'m glad they sorted out their mis-communication ;)
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was so sweet...they are just too cute. I starting to think Rye was a private assassin. Can\'t wait for what you have in store next.
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not many authors are able to write believable action sequences, especially with a character formerly designated as a total victim and toy, it was bloody magic. The only reservation that I have is how the violence will affect the ongoing plot line. or once the shock and the drugs have worn off, how would a pacifist who had never prevously witnessed any form of violence cope with the almost casual aggression and brutality exhibited by a previously innocuous, trusted innocent? Love this twist and turn though, it has given the plot even more possibilities.