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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Promising, no really. No new topic, but far from being boring.
Just two hints: The first chapters are way to short. And just write what is fitting. If it is non-con than write it this way and try to give it some style. But I think you will manage.
Just two hints: The first chapters are way to short. And just write what is fitting. If it is non-con than write it this way and try to give it some style. But I think you will manage.
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Can\'t wait to see what happens next!
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October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, keep posting ^^
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ok Im going to give constructive criticism, I am not a flamer cuz thats just rude. Ok first off it does kinda seem cliche but I like it anyway. It\'s really good so far. Secondly the chapters are way too short, not enough to say what is where and when is when and why is this and that. Oh yeah put more descriptions on how the guy looks besides handsome and whatever. Overall it is a good story, and thank goodness it isn\'t full of spelling errors, I saw only 2 or 3 but I really didn\'t worry about it since I kept reading it seeing where it was going. Anyways this was good update chapter 3 I can\'t wait to read it ^_^
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@ ch2 deadly and exciting and deadly and wicked. Did I say deadly? deadly.
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey please update