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by hellparadiso

person Kali
schedule October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great Zeus\'s Bread! This story has more twists than the dance. Lol I know I use those terms a lot but sweet jesus, you have me hooked. I serously think this is one of the best stories I have ever read. That BASTARD! He has been seeing another girl the whole time! BASTARD! He is a possive little bitch that lies and cheats! He didn\'t drop out because he couldnt support himself! It\'s because of his lame violin thing! OMG they can\'t say it was Mikes fault for doing the right thing!!!! Brent must go! Mike and Sam all the way. Mike is such a better person all together. Maybe he can convince Sam to be the strong one and dump Brent! GRR I dislike Brent GREATLY. Lol I\'ll come back and review later when im not so worked up!

Kali
person Kali
schedule October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I seriously dont know why people havent reviewed a ton. This story is so great! It was more curveballs than a baseball game! I am serisously confused on who to believe. I think your such a talented writer. I can\'t wait to see what happens, and who she believes. Maybe she will be right... maybe she is in store for heartbreak. Please update soon, you story is totally gripping me. Not many authors are as talented as you.

Kali
person foamyfan15010 (NSI)
schedule October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ha! I knew it! Brent is such an asshole!!!
person .Untitled
schedule October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My goodness, your writing is superior. I love it to bits. It\'s not elaborately descriptive to the point it\'s plain annoying to read, but has the occasional jem word that sets it apart from \'good\' writing to \'great\'. The story itself is genius. It\'s wonderful how knowledgeable you are when describing a college campus and life, with the study sessions and quirky proffessors.

That last chapter sure killed a few things for me. xD; I still believe in Mike! Go Mike! I have this faint idea Brent set it all up with those \'friends\' just so Sam would get all confused... At least I hope so. ;D I check back daily for new chapters. Don\'t let this one fall out like so many other people do when they start writing something radical.
person foamyfan15010 (NSI)
schedule October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh BULLSHIT! Brent is so lying! He just wants he to stop hanging out with Mike, because he\'s all creepy and possesive... Augh... Weirdo... This chapter made me very sad. :o( Fix it, Leylia!!!
person Anon
schedule October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t even know what to think now. Something about Brent still doesn\'t sit right with me. I really don\'t like him and I can\'t pinpoint why. What is the deal really between him and Mike? It can\'t be like he says. It just can\'t be. Can\'t wait to see where you take this. Please don\'t make Mike the devil. He\'s too damn cute. Anyway, I can\'t wait to see where it goes.
person suicide_girl
schedule October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hope that the story ends up as Bret lying and Mike not being like that. Mike and Sam belong together. I don\'t really like that Bret dude. Keep writing though.
person Tirch
schedule October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice twist! I really like how this story is progressing. And I really don\'t know what to think! I mean, I have adored Mike so far. Is it possible he really is just being a dick? Can\'t wait for the next update!
person Sanam
schedule October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story. The idea of it is like...wow. hehe. well anyways, update soon!! :)

Sanam
person foamyfan15010 (NSI)
schedule October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, chicky doodle, long time no see! Great chapter, I like forceful, impatient Mike. He\'s very hot. Posessive, creepy Brent is still annoying, and I\'m more curious than ever about what kind of past he and Mike have together, because they seem to dislike each other intensely. Hmmmm... Anyhoo, it\'s good to see you have a couple more reviewers. Good luck with the next update!