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for Naivete

by hellparadiso

person Michelle
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I was so disappointed its not right she was to deal with Brent anymore. I hope when she goes to the doctor it ends up shes not really pregnant. It would suck if she had to give up everything. This chapter had alittle too much drama, and I was disappointed in it and where the story is now going.
person Shanna
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story you have me hooked. I\'m enjoying the twist and although I know what I think I want for Sam I\'m not going to try to influence you. I look forward to reading more soon.
person foamyfan15010 (NSI)
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. Wasn\'t expecting that... lol BOOM... Trashed dorm... BOOM... Sam\'s pregnant... BOOM... Sam and Mike almost have sex... BOOM... Brent hurt Sam... BOOM... Mike beats the shit out of Brent... BOOM... Life changing decisions... You really know how to lay it on us all at once don\'t you? lol Nice to see you back, I\'ve been waiting to see an update on this one. :o) Good luck with the next chapter!
person Anon
schedule October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
thank u for leeting me kno bout the update!!!!!!! =D =(( bruises
person LKN
schedule October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh good lord... why did you stop there? What did he do to her?
person Anon
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more please! this chapter was amazing and wow. I just want sam and mike to get together so much. Please update again soon. I won\'t be able to rest easy until i know she\'s ok. Thank you so much for writing. this is an awesome story and you are a great writer.
person foamyfan15010 (NSI)
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh no! Brent better not have done anything to her, the stupid bastard! I\'m so glad that she\'s with Mike now. They\'re so good for each other. I loved the whole Eddie Izzard outburst. Very comical. ;o) It was also interesting to see a chapter from Mike\'s POV. Nice job, and there didn\'t seem to be any butchering. So, kudos to you. It\'s hard to write from a guy\'s POV, I know. Can\'t wait for more!
person Anon
schedule October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
pleae continue! and when u do, email me with updates at idunk24@yahoo.com please?! nice story, more action! =p, yeah great =D thanks =)
person Anon
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good chapter. Can\'t wait to see how she deals with horrible Brent. I really love these characters. Your writing style really makes them feel real. Almost like they are people I know from my own college. Thank you so much. Update again soon.
person Anon
schedule October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so good. This chapter really made me feel a lot better. I know that mike is going to come out on top in the end. I can\'t wait to find out what really happened between Mike and Brent. This story is so good. Thank you so much. Update again soon please.