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October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...I\'m impressed. Usually when two charectors meet for the first time, the dialog is either rushed to the point where it just seems fake, or slowed to the point that its just boring. But this was a nice in between, the charectors speech flowed together nicely and it was very life like. Also I like how easy it is for me to relate to the charectors. The added humor was a nice bonus, I love your style of writing, andI hope you continue to put out even more quality stories.
~love Torne
~love Torne
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October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this story is great!!Iwanna read more.plz add more chapters soon ^_^
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good chapter. it really was nice to see it go right between them for once. Can\'t wait to read more. Also, was Jake thinking that Liz looked hot when he first saw her are the fair? When he stifled his thoughts i think that that was very cute, but jeez way to keep the reader in suspense.
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww, this is good, I can\'t wait for more! I wish the chapters were longer, but hey, if you update, that\'s fine with me.
-B
-B
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This chapter reminded me about the new show on CBS \"How I met your mother\".. Update soon.
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awwww!!! I love this story! It\'s adorable! Hehe I can relate to Liz a bit for I am actually shy when it came to guys. Then one of my best friends set me up with my current boyfriend. lol. I am sunked too. Hehe I can\'t wait to see what happens next.
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good new chapter. Can\'t wait to read more. I love the characters and how emotionally crippled they both are . Perhaps jake could take a little more intiative though. Thanks so much for this story.
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October 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am really enjoying this story and can\'t wait to see where it goes. Please continue writing.
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I want more. I want more.
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehe- i actually liked that first date... :)