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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Way too much build up for practically no sex. You should rewrite this and expand the sex scene and then submit it again.
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January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this one was good but not as good as the first one .. to quick to the point :)
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October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very well writen. Cant wait for the follow up
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September 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, that was naughty and very well written. will there be more? very good story
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September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it was real good! Def. continue!!! !!!
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September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good job. You captured his feelings of lust and desire but also how sick he was at himself. I\'d like to see more on this.
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September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh yes... very nice. Not only was it written very well but it certainly enticed me. I\'ve been desperate for some more heavy erotica; glad I found you (or rather... you found me. *winks* ) Man... well, I did enjoy this little tale. I also enjoy how it made him sick to his stomach that he couldn\'t hold back and threw up when he got home. I half expected her to enjoy it and tell JUST so he\'ll come back or she\'ll go to him at night. *shrugs* Damn... it sure floated my boat.
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September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant. really that\'s all i can say.
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please continue...does she know who did it?
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, please continue.