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Hmmm... Oh dear... Well, I for one am glad you're rewriting. I'll confess, I only read to chapter six I believe and then skipped to the notice. :) I have questions. Why wouldn't Luc tip police off that his friends are targets? So instead of him having to keep finding bodies the police could be watching his friends. Is tracking down some crazy teen's real identity that impossible to find from their instant messenger name? Those cops aren't very good at their jobs... :) Why would Luc just let Kyle do that to him? I would have punched him in the nuts, rip his pecker off, or bite down hard. He would be in too much pain to do anything but scream. And while I'm on that, why wouldn't CJ hit him over the head while he was preoccupied with Luc sucking him off? What kind of protector is he?! All right, all right, I'll stop ranting. :) Forced blow job scenes always irk me, because that is one form of assault where if I was a victim I think I'd fight back real quick.

All in all I hope you are still writing and honing your skills. Also, this wasn't meant to offend, at all. Just was pointing some things out. (Note the smiley faces found throughout.) ;)

Happy writing!
C. Reed

Where is the rest? :((((

Love the story so far. But I have a question. What happened to Richard?

oh wow

Oh my, I just read the whole story so far,and me like. Good job, hope that there will be more soon, I want to read more! :)

I noticed these two things; when someone is outside, I think you should use the word; ground instead of floor. (floor is inside a building) and when you say; their, I think you mean to use; there.

But anyway, I like this! =)

ahhhhh!!!
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please don't let cj be dead, please please please

........... -Nearly weeps.- Oh my........ I can't believe I have read all you have so far. -Big, creepy gaze- I want more. -Actually has the flu so is at home...... Doing nothing.. Should have been sleeping hours ago.. But couldn't stop reading.- Anyways.... Marvelous.....

you didn't update for so long i almost lost hope on this. YOU BETTER UPDATE BEFORE the 24th cuz then i'm gone!!! PLEASE UPDATE I WANNA READ O_O!!! this is a great story i wanna know what happens next!

Damn...you just don't know who to trust anymore. Well lets just hope that Kyle didn't kill CJ and CJ comes to save Luc. Why in the world is Kyle doing this? What were his motives? Is CJ or Genna still alive? Probably not Genna, But we can hope. What will Kyle do with Luc? I basically bursting at the seams, you got to update this ASAP!!!!!!
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Noooo! Omg, I wanna know who it is sooo bad. Poor Luc. :( I feel so sorry for him. The only thing I was wondering about was his lack of emotion for Rachel when he found her body. Anyway, great story so far. I can't wait to read more.