rate_review Reviews

This is an excellent story and the only reason I can figure for why it doesn't have more hits and more reviews is the formatting. You need to remember that only one person speaks in a paragraph at a time.

But the writing is top notch, which surprised me. Usually if someone doesn't unerstand paragraphs, they aren't a very good writer. You are the exception to that rule, you are an excellent writer. I advise you to format the story better and try again.