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for Corina's Weekend

by dgelderung

person l\'etje
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon
bye bye
person ur_luvr
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god! This is so awsome! I really want to know what happens next!
person Anon
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah relief at last!!! Those guys made it great for her too!! great story- I love it!
person Kuro Hasa-Hana
schedule August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s not bad....only one thing. Real fifteen year-old girls usually aren\'t 90 pounds. The majority of them reach 100 pounds or over (usually in the teens), which is right around the weight usually had when one starts their period. Thus, being 90 pounds and fifteen years old is highly unrealistic. There are some people that are/were that weight at that age, but the average girl isn\'t. Also, most girls that age are taller then 4’11”.

But, you know, beyond that detail-ishy and really unimportant stuff, it was pretty good. Keep it up, cuz I\'ll be reading.

Hana
person trebor
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad for a first effort. Like the pacing of the story. Hey this is my first review. lol
person l\'etje
schedule August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon
person tminus1
schedule August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was on purpose wasn\'t it? Lol, leave your readers in anticipation? Good job! Looking for the next chapter hopefully soon.
person Anon
schedule August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ah! come one love! leaving all ur readers hanging like that! i have to say that that was a great piece if i\'ve ever read one. definatley cannot wait for ur nxt chapter(s)
person bale
schedule August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was getting intresting so put up the other chapters.
person Angel
schedule August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was a good chapter - i think that perhaps you ruined it at the end with the last \'scene\' though