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wow! Thats hot! they moved really quickly...is there a reason for that? Keep it up babe! i can\'t wait for more.

hot DAMN, girl!

A promising start so far. You\'ve got some character development going, with some good insight as to what is going on inside their heads. Given the genre is \"Romance\", you\'re doing fine with the primary story line. The plotline involving the mysterious killer probably needs to be advanced in the next couple of chapters... you\'ve loaded that gun so you need to use it soon. Why would he be after her now? It\'s been years. Does he hate her entire family or was he just after her and killed her parents instead? There has to be a reason to hate; the insane madman who kills for no reason is just sloppy writing.

Keep up the good work.

yowza! That\'s some pretty hot stuff, there, Marook! Keep it up--this is good stuff.

great start-keep it comming

All I can suggest is to have longer chapters or your going to probably get poor reviews due to the fact that they are to short..

Nice job...i didn\'t know you wrote! Now i\'m excited to here more...nice teaser btw. I can\'t wait till you post again dahling. I\'ll tell Adonia so she can read too. :)