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for Original Sin

by Tirch

person nish
schedule October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awwwww.......isnt that cute ... well so much for notwanting to have sex in his parents house*wicked smile* ... anyway it was cute and im actually truly glad that u decided to finish Why Bother first.......
person Eboni
schedule October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That chapter was so sweet and romantic. Update soon.
person Cariad
schedule October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Some changes? As in Zip and Sarah changes? But then I\'m not sure.

Anyway, I\'m very glad for Joseph and Lianna. And Sin is really trying to be accepted, that\'s a first for her.

Good chapter.
person foamyfan15010 (NSI)
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awwww... His family is so sweet. I can\'t wait to see how they react to her tatoos... Anyway, don\'t worry about the delay. I\'m glad you finished Why Bother, too. I\'m just glad you\'re back, because I was beginning to jones for this story. Have I mentioned how much I love Eddie? Because I do. He\'s such a likable character. Why can\'t there be an Eddie for me? I\'m seriously considering becoming a nun...
person Anon
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*sighs* this just gets better and better. sin and eddie! go team.
person Wolf
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Tirch please dont make zip break eddie and sin apart please! pweety pwez.......

P.S.

awesome chap
person templeton21
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YES!!! I woke up this morning and read the chapter and I had to keep from laughing with happiness so I didn\'t wake anyone up. I\'m so happy for Joseph and Lianna. That seriously just made my day. And why is Eddie so perfect? Seriously.
person Stalwart
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great job on the story overall so far, but I particularly liked this chapter. I can relate to Sin with the whole family thing, though not at the same level. I certainly wasn\'t expecting that \"I love you,\" though.

I figured I should start reviewing this now instead of waiting for the end like Why Bother.
person Cariad
schedule October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Get rid of Zip. He\'s the trouble maker here. Everytime we see him one of them is confused about the other ;op
person Angel
schedule October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nooooo Zip is like this little evil devil on Sin\'s shoulder telling her the wrong things! I hope things go well for them in Ohio!! =)