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for Original Sin

by Tirch

person papermiracle
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ahhhhhh amazing.....please update soon cause i can\'t wait to see what happens next.
-G
person GirlFixer
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aaagh I feel like I\'m on the edge of my seat here - I\'m really excited about this story because we don\'t know who Sin is going to get together with. Zip does seem like the type who will eventually win her round, even though I think most of us are rooting for Eddie!

person Blue
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey Tirch, you\'re doing real well, such a sweet start but then ending up with Zip & that kiss! Still rooting for Eddie, but I know you author types have to provide some kind of conflict - You have a reputation to uphold and all for being bittersweet!

Anyway, as always eagerly awaiting your next chapter.


person Lady Rain`
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see I\'m not the only one! I\'d so much rather be called sport.

Man, poor Sin falling for the new \'mature\' charm in Zip. While I can\'t blamce her, he is being quite irrisistable, I still want her to get with Eddie. He\'d treat her so much better. So have Zip do something incredibly shallow so we don\'t fall in love with him, I mean so Sin doesn\'t fall in love with him, again!


I shall wait again, patiently as always (checks AFF every night) for your next chap!
person vaslats
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eddie sounds like a really great guy and Sin, just a troubled gal who just needed a \"best friend\" kind of person to talk to, and not the \"guy talk\". I don\'t want to presume to tell you what I want for the characters, however I really like the way Zip is turning out. And it seems to me that Zip & Sin somehow are more suited to be together as they do have extreme sides that each can tolerate. Know what I mean? I don\'t want Eddie to get hurt though, just Zip & Sin are just screaming out to be together.

Thanks for a great read, I really hope to see more chapters!
person sesshy_lover
schedule August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DUM DE DUM!!! IM BACKKK~!!! LALLALALALAA... AND IM LOVIN THIS STORY SOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!! I LOVE EDDIE, I LOVE SIN, I LOVE EDDIE AND SIN TOGETHER!!! WEWEEEWEEEEWEEEE!!! NOW IM ACTING LIKE A LITTLE KID... ^-^ BUT I SERIOUSLY WISH YOU WOULD UPDATE ANOTHER CHAPTER... OR ELSE ILL CONTINUE SULKING IN THIS LITTLE CORNER IN MY DARK DARK ROOM... ALL OF A SUDDEN EVERYTHING BECAME DARK AND COLD WHEN I DIDNT HAVE ANY MORE CHAPTERS TO READ... T^T WAHHHH!!! I FEEL SOOO LOST AND ALL ALONE!!! I WANT MY CHAPTER NOW!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!! PRETTY PLEASE!!!??? IS ANYONE OUT THERE????!!!!!!!! -_-;;;
person Memory Chase
schedule August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry i havn\'t reviewed lately I had an accident with an eye and couldn\'t see for awhile, but I\'m healed and have just read the last few chapters of your story, I love it. Your making it kind of hard to choose between zip and eddie. At first I really didn\'t like Zip, too cocky, but I got the sense he has genuine feelings for Sin. N-E-Way i can\'t wait for more. Hope you post soon.
person Mina
schedule August 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the fast update...can\'t wait to see what happens next to Sin and Edddie.
person Anon
schedule August 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing chapters 3 and 4. I don’t know if Zip is pursuing a relationship with Sin for the right reasons and not just for the ideal of what a relationship is to him. Cause he did mention that his band mates all have someone except him. Okay I am not a psychologist so I just need to shut up. It would be great if Eddie actually pursue Sin and not just be the guy she can lean on like how he was with Lianna. I really like chapter 4 because we get to see a different side of Eddie and Sin. Wow was Eddie being sarcastic and funny and as for Sin she was open and vulnerable. Still rooting for Eddie to end up with Sin. Sorry I am rambling on but my reason is that this is a good story so far. Thanks for letting me be Dr. Phil for a minute and thanks for updating.
person Cariad
schedule August 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was nice to learn about Sin\'s past. She\'s now less than a mystery. It is funny in some way how she treat Eddie like the \"gay best friend\". She feels he\'s non-threatening and so can open to him, contrarly to Joseph and Tavaina. With those two it seems more like she wanted to be treat as equal, and so had to hide a part of herself which could have made them look at her differently.