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for Original Sin

by Tirch

person cu-kid
schedule August 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh soooo wanting to bitch-slap them!! ^_~

LOVE the chapter! Eddie admitted his feelings...yay! Now for Sin ^_^ Wanted to wring her neck when she left with Zip, but I guess she\'s just going to have to make that mistake again *sigh*

More! ^_^
person Lady Rain
schedule August 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whew what a party! I so should have been invited, cause then I could have locked the door and prevented Zip from showing up and ruining things and then I could have found a way to shoo Ava to some other really great and funny guy so it would be Sin that Eddie takes to the balcony, and therefore it\'d be Eddie that Sin would be kissing that night.

*sigh* But apparently I wasn\'t.
Anyway great chapter!! I enjoyed this one, it had angst written all over it, well and within it rather subtly too.

person Cariad
schedule August 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay I\'ve mad my choice: Sin and Eddie.

At least he recognized his feelings for her. But she\'s on her way there. Jealousy is a good sign. But I feel sorry for Zip. She left with him for the wrong reasons. At least tell me she will hold him back. Funny, you have one horny girl and one horny guy, but you put them with people who are trying to catch someone\'s else attention. Now, Zip and Eva that\'s an idea.
person Memory Chase
schedule August 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don know whether to love you or hate you right now. I mean damn, talk about confusing. In LADCT i didn\'t like Eddie very much but he is so sweet, and is still getting tugged around. I hope he will find someone (SIN) soon. As far as Zip goes I love cocky men no matter how much I hate them............did that make any sense? N-E-Way you are making it so hard for me to deciede which on ei like better. I mean they both need someone and Sin is only one person. See here I am goin around in circles. I guess I will have to deal until your next update, but it better be soon. You know I love your stories so no matter what happens I\'ll be happy with the out come.
person Nikku
schedule August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No matter how many times I come noto this site, i keep on forgetting to review this. I\'ve read it but I haven\'t reviewed. Will you forgive me?

You\'re doing a great job and I can\'t wait for more. sin and eddie will make a wicked cute couple. *winks* keep up the great work and update soon.
person sesshy_lover
schedule August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*LETS OUT BREATH...* AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT WAS THE BEST FUCKING STORY I HAVE EVER READ IN MY INTIRE LIFE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! O_O OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOURE SOOOOOOO TALENTED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOW IM REALLY REALLY HAPPY!!! YOU JUST MADE MY DAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!... PLEASE UPDATE REALLY REALLY REALLY SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!... ARIGATOU GOZAIMASU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.......
person Angel
schedule August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love this story! I really hope Sin doesnt get with Zip again... it will lead to trouble as always! Eddie is such a great guy and him and Sin get along SO WELL. UPDATE SOON!!
person Memory Chase
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really liked this chapter. After really thinking about it I think eddie and sin should end up together. Maybe not at first but eventually. Don\'t get me wrong i really like Zip too. He (at times) seems sincere. But Eddie deserve to be with someone, and oppisites do attract. I\'m sure i\'ll be happy with whatever way you choose to go. Oh and about the eye its doing fine, thanks for asking.
person cu-kid
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*laughs* That was a great way to end the chapter. I like the way you have even me questioning Zip\'s motives. I think he\'s sexy and he seems to have become sweeter...but I can understand Sin\'s reaction to him telling her he loves her. I won\'t lie and say that the prospect of Sin and Zip together doesn\'t interest me...but I think I\'m becoming a hardcore Eddie fan ^_^

Loved the chapter. As the reader it\'s so frustrating sometimes to read stories like this because you just want to grab the characters, shake them, and say, \"Open your eyes! You both like each other! Now, go have sex and get it over with for god\'s sake!\" But, as I\'m sure I\'ve said before, you are so good at weaving such wonderful tapestries with words, that I am content to let you feed it to me one chapter at a time.
person Wolf
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
.................(snarls) DAMN YOU ZIP!!! you BASTARD UR FUCKING EVERYTHING UP U SELFISH DICK! DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

(yells) EDDIE AND SIN FOREVER!