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for Original Sin

by Tirch

person GirlFixer
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aargh this is so frustrating! But in a good way. I really really like Sin with Zip, but then I feel soo sorry for Eddie and think that he should be given a chance. Why do girls always make the wrong choices? I\'ve been in the situation where I\'ve had the ex who\'s bad for me wanting me back, and the new guy who\'s perfect. But what do I do? I choose the ex. Then realise that girls are idiots. Anyway, good job and I think this story is ace!
person angel
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Noooooooooo awww why did she have to sleep with him all weekend she would have had such a clear head if she didnt!
person cukid9
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I would kill her...except I like her too much ^_^

Yay! Sin\'s finally starting to realize she likes Eddie! I can just imagine how uncomfortable the next chapter is going to be when they see each other for the first time and they don\'t know the other likes them. It\'s going to be great! ^_^ I actually wasn\'t as mad at her for going home with Zip as I thought I would be. Mostly, I think, because she seems to hate herself for the decision now that she\'s talked to Eddie. And, oh my god, when Zip comes back from tour and if Sin and Eddie are together...! Arg! It\'s so hard to WAIT! ^_^
person Blue
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, this is just to keep the review whore happy - just so as she keeps feeding my addiction, especially seeing as she has me on tenderhooks!

*Sigh*

You are however, still a merciless tease, but keep it up - the story that is, not the teasing!
person Memory Chase
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
For me this is one of those chapters where you just want to jump right into the story, so you can tell everyone whats going on.
i mean if only Sin and Eddie knew how they felt about each other, everything would be hunky dory. But there in lies your conflict. A story has got to have conflict. And your a master at making your characters come to life. As for Zip I like him more and more every day...........damn it. I can\'t wait to see what happens next.
person iotc247
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eddie and Sin better end up together. Otherwise you owe us another story for eddie. But still Id rather Eddie and Sin be together.. Just seems right. Though if they do get together I have a suggestion. Have sin cheat on Eddie with Zip and have her struggle to get back with Eddie after zip fucks up again.
person Michelle
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
was that...a Veronica Mars reference/quote? woo! next can you use \"I could write down that I met Kid Rock every weekend at the Hedonism Lodge for sensual massage and smoothies, but that doesn\'t make it true.\"
oh, and keep up the good work! let\'s get some Eddie/Sin action soon, please.
person Cariad
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I couldn\'t hate her. But I wouldn\'t be in her shoes right now. Well come to think of it, two hot boys at your beck and call... forget that I wouldn\'t mind being in her shoes.

I guess Sin will have an important decision to make after Zip will be back, unless Eddie play his card right and then it would be too late for Zip by that time. You know I\'m really confused now. And Zip sound so sincere too, grrr...
person Anon
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmm...loving the story!!!
person sesshy_lover
schedule August 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AWE!!! EDDIE IS SOOOO CUTE!!!... I LOVE IT WHEN HE GETS SOOOO JEALOUS LIKE THAT!!!... AND BESIDES, I THINK ZIP SHOULD HAVE A CHANCE WITH SIN BECAUSE HE REALLY CARES FOR HER... PLEASE UPDATE QUICKLY AGAIN... THANKS!