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for Original Sin

by Tirch

person nish
schedule September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yipppeeeeeeeeee............................ FINALLY...............uhhh... thats so cute he way hes all like caring n stuff.......I like this chappie alot... good stuff
person Anon
schedule September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing chapters 10 and 11, finally Sin and Eddie reveal their true feelings for each other emotionally and physically. I thought the sweetest thing Sin said at the end of chapter 11 was “So this is what this is supposed to feel like…” and “I get it now”. I wonder what Zip’s reaction is gonna be when he finds out it’s Eddie who\'s the nicest guy on earth. Thanks for updating.


person Dom
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you know what i liked about this chapter the most? sin never mentioned or thought of zip were she and eddie were having sex. i just get irritated sometimes when authors write a sex scene where they compare their past lovers..i mean, you\'re screwing someone while thinking and COMPARING him/her...to someone else? say what? yeah....so, i guess it shows how caught up she is in eddie....by the way OMG FINALLY! lol, i\'ve got about as big a grin as ava did at the snob party. :D sin and eddie compliment each other...sin makes eddie a bit more crazy and eddie stabilizes sin a little. i love this story!! it\'s got such a nice balance to it. anyways, please update sooN!
person may
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it!!1 its good to see nice guys dont always finish last. however, I could be wrong, I mean, I didnt think anything would go wrong with lianna and joseph but I was wrong.... I\'m rambling and slightly crunk, I\'m gonna shut up now.

person Eboni
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is really good. I can\'t wait to see what happens next. I love reading opposite attracts romance stories. I see myself in both Sin and Eddie. Both characters are really great. I\'m not feeling Zip. The only way I could like him is if he plays a part in bringing Sin and Eddie together. Update soon. :-)
person Lady Rain
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I now have a load of towels to wash. Thank you. ^_^

That was just plain great! I mean, seriously, you did a magnificent job on this chap!

Now as for the whole Zip issue. He\'s a tough one to get anything through to. But hey, my momma always told me 2x4s work wonders on the male species. Me? I prefer 4x4s, Ford built and rearin\' to go. And if that won\'t get a man\'s attention, believe me, nothin will.

I\'ll be watching for the next installment as always!
person sesshy_lover
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OHHH!!! YAY!!! THAT WAS A SUPER DUPER FAST UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!! AND NO EVIL CLIFFE TOO!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!!!! *TACKLELICKGLOMPS* YAY!!!!!! AND FINALLY, EDDIE AND SIN GOT THEIR $%@%#*^$&* ON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HEHEHE...LOVIN IT!!!!! BUT I FEEL BAD FOR ZIP NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!... *CRY*
person Wolf
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol just watch zip tries to pick a fight with eddie and eddie kicks his ass, oh god ic ant wait, u did good tirch! but if u fuck their relationship up ill hit u witha pillow across ur head!
person GirlFixer
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was a fab chapter! I loved it. However, there\'s something niggling me at the back of my brain...I feel really really sorry for Zip, and I still think I\'d like to see him get a few chapters. I much prefer the hot rock dudes to the nice guy types :P
person Cariad
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a night!! Feel free to give us more hot stuff like that :p

Zip finally get it for now. But he was pretty damn annoying. I hope he won\'t get all jealous on Eddie when he will see them together next.