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for My Strange Journey

by fantasylives

person Anon
schedule December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please update!
person keyonnamc
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love what you have so far...So their is a red-headed elf after all. What could the Prince of the Elves want with Sam? I can' t wait for more, so update ASAP!!!!!
...(Y)
.(^_^)
person Dracon Valise
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I eagerly wait for more, Don't think I have forgotten just because you don't see me online much!
person crazyyaoilover
schedule August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh... I love the idea of yours. So please update soon when you had free time. Keep up the good work!!!
person PyTerato
schedule August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Much better. ^_^ Now where\'s that third chapter?!

~C~
person vin
schedule August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool story so far! I look forward to more. ~Vin
person PyTerato
schedule August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I\'ve got some friendly critiques for you, and praises.

At first, when I opened the page to your fiction, I was kind of reluctant to read, and considered clicking the back button. But I decided to give it a chance. The whole chapter looked like one paragraph, but upon closer inspection, I realized that it wasn\'t, and the chapter was divided skillfully into paragraphs like it should be. May I suggest for the third chapter, double the lines between paragraphs so that it\'s not so intimidating for readers who just come? That way it will not only attract more readers, but will be easier to read.

Now, The whole plotline was what made me decide to read anyway. It\'s an ingenius idea, and I\'m just upset I didn\'t think of it first, lol. I am so glad I did read both chapters, because you are quite skilled. All the right punctuation, well worded, and interesting characters. I loved it, and I can\'t wait to read more... It will have NC-17-style material, right? Well a girl can always hope... I certainly will be watching out for more from you. Thank you for this, it really was a worth-while read.

~C~