rate_review Reviews

seriously? it could be a cute story- but whats with the "bleeping" of words? your on an adult site honey, its a little redundant to be doing that here.

i think you need to keep writing this story and if you do i will more that happly review it agan

This is a really interesting story. You should keep up with it. I like the mystery is brings about.

i love that soo much. this is the best story i have read on here. i hope to see more from you soon!

ur a good writer, but...to put it nicely, the way u wrote it made it sound as if u were scared of mentioning anything...well...sexual. as if ur afraid of what other people would think. let the words flow, cause right now...they are childish in ur necessity to keep from saying mere words. let them flow as the come to u.

later,
chris

Firstly, let me say I do like the story, the Craven character is quite interesting. Would suggest though, if you\'re old enough to actually legally write here, dispense with the stars, it\'s a bit juvenile and honestly rather annoying. If you want to write erotica, you should be able to write the actual words. Ypu might want to look into a beta as well. But you definatly have a talent for writing, I\'ll continue to follow the story.

ohhh i like a lot! update soon!