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January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start. I agree with the reviewer above who suggested you make the girl older. Ten is a squick point for a lot of people, myself included.
This story is in desperate need of a spellcheck, but other than that, not bad at all. It's a shame that it seems to have been abandoned.
This story is in desperate need of a spellcheck, but other than that, not bad at all. It's a shame that it seems to have been abandoned.
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sexy
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September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE. please? thank you.
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ya need to update please
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon
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July 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well? where\'s pt2 ?! this is so hot, i want more :p oh yeah, please :o)
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June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is slightly creepy with how young the daughter is but you\'re a really good writer next time PLEASE MAKE THE DAUGHTER OLDER!!!! teens CAN be a daddie\'s little girl people!
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmm interesting...write the next one soon
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Go On!! need more
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep going! You can\'t just leave me hanging like that! It\'s awesome, but you\'re leaving a bit too much left for the imagination. Hurry up and write the second chapter!