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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey hey glad your not gettin too scifi....soooo if the other two guys aren\'t getting pregnant what about nick eh eh....I\'m very interested in where nick came from......again I\'m really likin the story
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved it =]
I hope you will write more soon!
I hope you will write more soon!
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg. that really sucks. i feel bad for norris and jason. are they going to still be together if they do go to micheal\'s realm and become pregnant? norris is too in love with jason!!! i don\'t want to see them apart!
and i\'m just the tiniest confused. well not confused some much as i had a misperception. so micheal is more of an alien then some creature of the night? to me when he referenced \"his world\" it was like, i dunno, earth long long ago not another planet entirely. or wait is it like another dimension or something??? wow. i\'m making this more complicated then it need to be. PLEASE explain it to me. my head is starting to hurt.
and i\'m just the tiniest confused. well not confused some much as i had a misperception. so micheal is more of an alien then some creature of the night? to me when he referenced \"his world\" it was like, i dunno, earth long long ago not another planet entirely. or wait is it like another dimension or something??? wow. i\'m making this more complicated then it need to be. PLEASE explain it to me. my head is starting to hurt.
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i was reading some of your reviews. that lizzie chick. the reason your fic doesn\'t \"flow\" is the tense of your verbs. instead of writing \'he said\' you write \'he says\'. not that it\'s entirely bad. and the cheesiness comes with the romance territory.
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Me again! Okay, interesting, and you definitely have potential, but, I have several comments.
After a person gets raped, they don\'t get cuddly with their rapist, in fact, in general, they don\'t get cuddly with anybody. And, you should get a beta, they\'re a beyond helpful resource, and it would help with your grammar problems.
After a person gets raped, they don\'t get cuddly with their rapist, in fact, in general, they don\'t get cuddly with anybody. And, you should get a beta, they\'re a beyond helpful resource, and it would help with your grammar problems.
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is like an onion. You unpeel more and more of it each time, throwing in little clues, little facts that end up being HUGE ones. And it\'s got great twists.
Looking forward to more of it!
Looking forward to more of it!
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*claps* i love quick updates......going all Sci-Fi on a sista huh....I\'m likin\' where I think it\'s going though...aaahh l\'amore
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
get me all worked up thinking there\'s a new chapter and what do i get? a grammar lesson. >P get your butt back to writing the story!!! you left it off with a bit of cliffie and i want to know what\'s going on with nick!
title suggestion: since your doing all this stuff with a new language why don\'t you translate \'my beloved shadow\'?
title suggestion: since your doing all this stuff with a new language why don\'t you translate \'my beloved shadow\'?
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'ve just started reading and i love the whole shadow concept, especially the term you used: \"shadow dancing\", VERY poetic! ;) Love the story, update soon!
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The languge te nyeco. I am looking forward to the next chapter.