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July 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good storyline and promising skill.
Couple things though There was like, no break in sentences. I looked and did not find ONE period, question mark, etc. It\'s like it\'s all one huge sentence. There\'s not even a comma anywhere in there.
As well, \"else\" is not spelled ells, and \"thought\" is not spelled throat. Actually \"throat\" is a bodypart, found on the neck.
O.O
Good otherwise though.
Couple things though There was like, no break in sentences. I looked and did not find ONE period, question mark, etc. It\'s like it\'s all one huge sentence. There\'s not even a comma anywhere in there.
As well, \"else\" is not spelled ells, and \"thought\" is not spelled throat. Actually \"throat\" is a bodypart, found on the neck.
O.O
Good otherwise though.