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July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have the writting and grammar skills of an 8 year old.
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is a GREAT story! the description of the guy in story, Scott, was a perfect descpription of my boyfriend whose name just happens to be Scott. Brown hair, blue eyes, great chest, six pack- in other words GORGEOUS!!!!!! PLEASE CONTINUE! *gives puppy dog face leans forward to beg more* ~Scott is my fav name for guys~
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was awesome. You should right more. Im definatly bookmaking this.
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June 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you have some FABULOUS ideas! i love them! i really do! but the grammar in the story makes it really hard to read. i get confused and kinda lost. you might wanna work on that, but other than that, i love the ideas!
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey! This fic has major potential. keep it going and update soon. Bye! ^_^
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m sure this story has potential. It\'s too bad I couldn\'t read it properly. Please check your grammar and spelling before posting a fic here. Proper punctuation and commas would also improve this story a lot. Commas are your friends, so use them.
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Take a little more time to develop the scenes between your characters. You have the basis of a great story. Just don\'t rush it.