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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The Locker Lesson was pretty good, except for some grammar errors. I thought it was hilarious, or at least something in every scene was. Not bad. Can\'t wait for the next, if you make one.
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June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter. Thanks for answering my question about Ms Lace\'s name.
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June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
One add on to my last review. Give a little more of a physical desriction of Ms Lace. So far we don\'t even know what color her hair is.
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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
worms?ewwww thats sick
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June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. Several punctuational errors though (really, it\'s just missing periods and commas). Since you claim it hasn\'t ended, it makes me wonder how the next part will turn out. Nice thing with the rat.
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June 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:)
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June 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start. I hope you continue.
Two things though. First you should really give Ms Lace a first name, if she\'s a slave, they wouldn\'t be calling her by her last name. Secondly, if she\'s on maternity leave, why is she still going to school?
Two things though. First you should really give Ms Lace a first name, if she\'s a slave, they wouldn\'t be calling her by her last name. Secondly, if she\'s on maternity leave, why is she still going to school?
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June 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
thats freaking hot