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October 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Are you fucking kidding me? You cant leave me hanging like these! Pleeeeeeeeeeease continue! And for sure include the escape!
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wooh! very nice! an almost steamy schmex scene! i love this story so far! can not wait for more! you have to hurry buddy! need more! ah!
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nicely written. You definitely have me hooked! I like where you\'ve taken the direction of this story.
Good job!
~Kir
Good job!
~Kir
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The tension is building quite steadily between Elliot and Locke ne? I really like the way you\'ve worded you\'re story. Easy to follow, nice flow and nice pace. Keep up the excellent work. Can\'t wait to see where things go.... especially seeing how things are heating up between those two... *evil grin*
~Kir
~Kir
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice, really, really nice. I liked how you set things up between Elliot and Locke. Phew! I can definitely agree with the idea of flashbacking how they\'ve escaped and all, but I also agree with the suggestion that you include the escape to lengthen the chapters... I say, go with writing the escape. I\'d like to see how you\'d work the situation. Especially if it includes more heated interactions between Elliot and Locke.... heh!
You definitely have a good story going on here... well-written, easy to follow, and great storyline. Excellent work. You deserve much praise! Please continue!!
~Kir
You definitely have a good story going on here... well-written, easy to follow, and great storyline. Excellent work. You deserve much praise! Please continue!!
~Kir
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Very interesting start so far! I like how you introduced your story, nice intro and backdrop, good info but not too much! Intriguing. Definitely going to follow this story. Very well done so far!
~Kir
~Kir
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June 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is fantastic so far. You should definately go into the escape. It would be good to stretch it out over a couple of chapters to increase the tension/action. Could you email me when you update? I\'d love to keep track of this story.
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June 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey i love your story i recon you should either do the escape or go straight after the escape but have flash backs or dreams to it so that the reader finds out how they escaped and what happened but as that is probably not any help i\'ll say i recon you should do they escape, great story keep it up.....