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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good story so far. I hope you will update soon! =]
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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I may have reviewed this before, but I just want to reinforce: PLEASE finish this! I can\'t wait to read more!
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June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please write more
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June 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This kid is fucking awesome! That would be me if I moved to stix-ville. Except I don\'t think I would have dressed nicely. I would have probably eased up on the black yeah, but not a button shirt. Not for a regular day. That\'s bull. Although I live in a semi-stix-ville already so, I sort of know what he goes through.
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just love this story so far! I can\'t wait to read more. So please update soon!!! I can\'t wait to see the reaction the kids at school will have of the new boy from New York. Amanda
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really love his whole attitude, VERY funny to read! MORE MORE MORE!!!!!
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very awesome! Please keep writing, I really wanna know what happens next! Darien sounds like a real hottie, he needs to hook up with one of the football players, hehehe.
-AlbinoShira
-AlbinoShira
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like.
Darien[sp?] is different. The other POV would be interesting. I\'m guessing if there was another, it would be the football player?
Only thing is, I\'m hoping this doesn\'t go down the cliche road. (Like new-guy-that-stands-out, goes to school, gets beaten, over-buff-and-lacking-intelligence-football-player comes to rescue...)
Doesn\'t look like it so far, though.
Darien[sp?] is different. The other POV would be interesting. I\'m guessing if there was another, it would be the football player?
Only thing is, I\'m hoping this doesn\'t go down the cliche road. (Like new-guy-that-stands-out, goes to school, gets beaten, over-buff-and-lacking-intelligence-football-player comes to rescue...)
Doesn\'t look like it so far, though.
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t read much original stories, but I must say that this one is at the top of the list. I can\'t wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work and please update soon.
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You\'re off to a great start and I\'d like to see what you can do with the characters. The story overall is interesting and you\'ve done well with descriptions without going overboard. Good job!
One note of dissatisfaction though... the misspellings I found detract from the overall content. I know, I sound really picky, but the use of your spellchecker will give your work a much more professional look and feel.
Thanks, and I\"m looking forward to your updatings!