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UPDATE!

The story is interesting. Continue and let me know when you update it!

Cool update dewd. Okay he seems a bit more like me now. It\'s getting creepy....Especially with the anime club and the airquotes. You\'re stalking me! AAAHH! Well gtg.

lol, Dpuppy. Anyway, Chapters 4-6 have not yet been edited by my editor, so I can\'t update yet. Plus, I don\'t want to pressure her with it. She\'s doing an internship now and plus, I\'m working evenings at a restaurant, so I barely get a chance to talk to her. So it might be a little bit. Sorry guys.

And if there\'s any other questions or anything, go ahead and email me. I check it every day. Sometimes more than once. I have no life. lol, hence why I write porn.

Your story is telling you to update. Can you hear it? \"Update me! Update ME!\" See? So you better update....

Thanks all for the great reviews.

Dpuppy- I had a word with my editor and she did think I used \"OMG\" a bit much as well. Surprisingly, the OMGs go away in later chapters. lol; Yea, there\'s a lot of sex. Once you get started, you just can\'t stop. It\'s like Pringles. The sex goes away in later chapters. Also, this is actually the longest story I\'ve ever written, porn or otherwise and I\'m glad you like that I have a perfect chapter length.

But again, thanks all for your great comments. Once my editor gets done with Chapters 4-6, I can post more.

Positive feedback is ALWAYS welcome. HATERS GO AWAY.

lol jk. Any constructive criticism is helpful. And positive remarks are helpful too.

Hey. That was good. I like this chapter the most. But I gotta say, Damn! How many times have they done things together? 3 or 4? Anyways the writing is getting a lot LOT better. Well bye.

woot woot! shower sex! update again soon!

Okay, I just wanna say, nice sex scene. It was good. Also you do greatly in the length of the chapters, something I am lacking a bit in. And also James is somewhat like me, After all I\'m gay and wanna be a singer, although he\'s more flamboyant then me. Now, some of the bad things. I hate saying this but really I hate the omg and the IM language. Really to be a writer here, you can\'t do that. That is what you do during an IM session with your pals or in a chatroom. Not for writing. That was my only prblem with this story, so please cut the IM language unless it\'s like this. (Example time)

I signed onto my computer. I noticed Kat was on. \"Hey u bitch. Wats up?\"

\"Nuttin much, u?\"

\"Nope. Hows ur pops?\"

\"OMG he called to tell me he can get me a job @ his work!\"


(End of example) See? Only time you can pull that. So please take my advice or you are going to get creamed with flames from people here. Oh and you can do the IM stuff in an Author\'s Note. So have a good one.

~D-Puppy

aww! they had sex!!! how cute! lol update again soon!