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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Can you do anything ELSE? I mean the ass fucking thing gets old...oh...I don\'t know...THE FIRST TIME, and you\'ve done it HOW many? Maybe a little deviation on this path of suckage would make the story better. The second chapter was good though.
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August 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story, but have a hard time following it because of typing errors. It would be so good if you would proofread and edit it.
Update, but take your time to check it first, use word if nothing else.
Update, but take your time to check it first, use word if nothing else.
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August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was good keep going and post soon
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going this is very good
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story you should do a Mark fucks Diana next chapter.
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was good but i need some more action
keep going and post soon
keep going and post soon
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice story so far. I definately think it has potential. The characters seem really *alive*. Tim is definately seems like my kind of guy. All I have to say is check your spelling before you post new chapters. Try having someone read it over before you post. That\'s all for now. Can\'t wait for the rest.
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July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep going! cant wait 4 an update!
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just started to read it, Love it already :) It flows very nicely, though your dialoge could use soem work