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hey, if you want more readers and reviews, it's better if you keep writing. that way you have more chapters and if you have more chapters more people will want to read your fic because it shows them that your serious about it. If you keep adding more chapers regularly your fic will show up at the top of the list, one of the first people will see when they look. As a reader, I hardly ever go past the first page because I know that if the author is serious, then I will see frequent chapter post on the first page. I suggest you try this. It's been a long time since you updated, you lose more readers than you tend to gain by waiting so long, though sometimes it can't be helped. You can't control the readers. Please update soon, by the way, I've already reviewed this chapter before.

hah, knew it. I feel better now Tobor\'s trying to save Serya. I really like the fantasy realm you dreamed up. It\'s something I would dream up, or a copy of what my mind would look like. I really like the way the seasons changed as they went around the tree, and the church is wonderful touch. Lovely chapter. Why is Serya\'s hair black as a little kid but blonde now that he\'s older. Are you turning his hair white because of all the fear in his life? I heard that happens; people can get so scared they\'re hair loses pigment.

How could Tobor do that to Serya? He\'s supposed to love him! How could Serya ever forgive him, even if Tobor was possessed and never wanted to hurt him? It\'s awful! Quick, right another chapter, I have to see that Tobor was possessed, that he didn\'t do it on puropse and that he\'ll take care of Serya and everything will be better. Things better get back to how they were before, even if it takes a long time.

I don\'t think I can ever like Tobor again if he doesn\'t help Serya. I want to see some nice, fluffy chapters with Tobor comforting Serya, otherwise I\'ll be very pissed with you. Quick, update now!

I love this story! It\'s so sweet and a nice break from the endless Snarry I like to read. I\'m a little shy so I don\'t like to make it obvious that I like gay novels, especially since my parents don\'t like gays, and it\'s so nice to read one right on the internet, with new and original characters. I\'m only up to chapter two so far, but I love the dark, calm mood and Tobar sounds so beautiful. Cool names, too. The plot sounds interesting so far and I\'m interested in the backgrounds of your two characters, can\'t wait to find out what happens. The only thing that bothers me is that I sometimes have a hard time understanding the point of view. You seem to switch from Tobar\'s point of view to Serya\'s but you don\'t say whose thinking what, very clearly, and I get lost a lot. When you write the characters point of view, I\'d like it if you would make it more clear whose thinking what, thanks! Keep it up!

i lurve this story! i\'m only half-way through chapter three, but i think it\'s really great..
i must admit it was quite confusing at first.. with that weird thing with serya when he leaves the club and that ninja girl comes out.. etc..

i thought it was going to be like a bdsm at first..
but, please, do keep posting!

Okay so I\'m your partner on the story, I still wanna review it. I LOVE it. Such yaoi goodness. Though since we\'ve been roleplaying awhile now we\'ve actually gotten waaaay better. Or at least I think so. Are you going to post Mickael and Derek? Look forward to it *huggles Serya*