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Heya, read yer chapter was abit short but never mind it was good can\'t wait what happens next, sooo plz update soon cuz its gettin exciting n i can hardly wait for the next chapter. Soo plz update soon and keep up the good work, thanxs.

Finally Liana gave up on him! He needs some time alone, like all men, to realize what good he is missing. Loved this chappie! Can\'t wait for the next. Keep it up!

Excellent! I am so glad that things finally came to a head between these two - I was getting desperate there! Great story and genuine characters; keep up the good work. I apprecite you posting and responding to our comments - thanks again!

Wow! This must be the week for breakups or something! Characters in two of your stories have broken up, as have mine xD Wonderful chapter. . Go Lianna! I like Jospeh, but he\'s turned into a jackass these past few chapters. . Good to see the girl finally stood up to him! Keep up the good work, and don\'t worry about writer\'s block. Don\'t force yourself to write just to please us. :D

Ok, maybe Frankie isn\'t all that bad. But I still hate her and I\'m beginning to dislike Joey too. Can\'t he even understand that some girls don\'t like taking people\'s money? You don\'t need to answer that, it was retorical. I\'m probably going to begin ranting about that soon. Umm, maybe Lianna should have left with the key, gotten her stuff out of the apartment, and then left the key behind. But i like the way you had it in this chapter. Tavian has been Joey\'s friend forever and now even joey has to mess that up. I really think frankie was there just to see what went on. I don\'t really believe that she liked Lianna at all, or that she though she made Joey happy.

I still think you\'re doing a wonderful, awesome, fantastic job. Keep up the great work, and maybe one of these I\'ll be able to write a story that is almost as good as this. Update soon.

that was amazing. i love being able to read about a girl who can speak for herself and not act like a floor mat. but, please, i am begging you, do not make joey have sex with frankie. that would just be so wrong.
yours truly,
cope

Hmm.. interesting chapter. It feels like you\'re setting Lianna up for some sort of outburst/explosion. I\'d certainly welcome it; she was a little more assertive that this, and the entire beginning of the relationshop with Joeseph was that she was a normal person, not a groupy. Still, there\'s a balance between being assertve (and getting what you want), and being a bitch (and turning people off with the way you complain). Hope she finds the way!

I like this story. The characters are unique and imperfect and you are doing a great job at keeping them consistant and \'in\' character. That being said - the plot seems to be struggling a little - there has to be a change in their relationship at some point. It seems as if the tension between them has been building up for many chapters and to still have no resolution at this point seems anti-clamatic. I am sure that you have a story line that you are working towards, having read your other stories I am sure that it will all come together wonderfully, but if this relationship contines in this vein for much longer I am not sure that I will care what happens to either character in the end. Sort of like - if he is such an selfish ass and she is too weak (spineless) to stick up for herself - prehaps they deserve the shallow relationship that they have after all...
I can\'t wait to see where you will take the story and hope you update soon - thanks for writing!

A very well written chapter!! Sorry if my criticism gets to you... it wasnt meant to.

Damn, that burns. Poor Lianna. Hope I spelt her name right, I can\'t remember if it was an a at the end or an e. It\'s like midnight where I am so I\'m dead. Anyway, I personally think Lianna shouldn\'t give into Joey like she does. She should stick by what she thinks, instead of just leaving it behind and letting Joey convince her of something. I enjoyed reading this chapter, it was awesome. I\'m glad Lianna got to talk to Eddie for awhile. Womans intuition, it always tells you something, and I think that\'s what happened with Lianna when she was going back to sit with Joey. I still think Joey and lianna make a cute couple and I hope Frankie doesn\'t try to get Lianna and Joey broken up. Keep up the great work, update soon.