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June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a review of Chapter 11... just thought I\'d say that since you\'re starting to get ahead of me:P Anyway... LOVE THE CHAPTER! Everything this story needed was bundled into a perfect little chapter that I couldnt have asked more from. I love that you are making Joseph deal with something, and I am very interested to see where you are taking this... I have a pretty good idea, and I have a great mental image of what I would like to see happen... so I am going to go read the next chapter now and see if I am right.
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June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Woo... Im good... but you\'re better:) Exactly where I thought it would head, and I think I have a few more ideas for the next chapter. You were correct to put that content material in its own chapter, I wouldnt have it any other way. GREAT WORK! Keep it going...
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June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW that was soooo bad for Lianna!!!! Im glad that she stood up for herself at the end and in the last chapter!
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June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my! How cruel!! Oh I feel so bad for Lianna! And I want to see Frankie hung, from various different body parts for the world to see what conniving little tramp she is!
But anyhow, this story is going great! I almost wanted to cry at this last chapter too! Please say they work things out and find a way to be together!
But anyhow, this story is going great! I almost wanted to cry at this last chapter too! Please say they work things out and find a way to be together!
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June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I can see now why you had Lianna give back the key. I\'m glad she gave it back. I want to kill Joey and Frankie so much right now. Frankie more then anything, it\'s her fault that Joey slept with her. She probably wanted that to happen and she probably heard when Lianna said she would come over the next day to get her stuff. Grr, i really hate Frankie, and I hate joey also. I hope he doesn\'t continue to mess everything up. Keep up the great work and update soon.
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I KNEW Frankie was going to ruin it! ^_^ And I had the exact same reaction as Lianna when Joseph said he loved her; NOW?! NOW, with Frankie in his bed and him having been a total jerk?!
Poor, poor Lianna. Girl needs to take a night out with Madison, Tavian, and Eddie (hint hint ^_^) Well, whatever ends up happening, I\'ll be hanging on every word. I wasn\'t at all disappointed about the length of the chapter -it was just chalk full of emotional turmoil. I do believe I teared up a little.
Poor, poor Lianna. Girl needs to take a night out with Madison, Tavian, and Eddie (hint hint ^_^) Well, whatever ends up happening, I\'ll be hanging on every word. I wasn\'t at all disappointed about the length of the chapter -it was just chalk full of emotional turmoil. I do believe I teared up a little.
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that guy is an asshole! I likw Eddie b/c people like jospheh don\'t change overnight. This is a great story (better then Eon\'s story ;-) It\'s way more entertaining and not all happy happy all the time. Update soon!
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please, dear Lord, tell me that is NOT the end of the story. I might have to hunt you down and hurt you until you write a happier chapter xD :D
J/K. Heartbreaking chapter. . I do believe I just lost ALL respect I had for Joseph. Seriously, the guy\'s turned into a jackass. . sorry or not, drunk or not, you shouldn\'t sleep with the girl your just recent ex hates with a passion. *SIIIGH* When will men learn?
J/K. Heartbreaking chapter. . I do believe I just lost ALL respect I had for Joseph. Seriously, the guy\'s turned into a jackass. . sorry or not, drunk or not, you shouldn\'t sleep with the girl your just recent ex hates with a passion. *SIIIGH* When will men learn?
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heya me again, Loved this chapter..im soo glad that Lianna stood up to Joseph he was acting like a total prick...really wud love to know what happens next..soo plz update soon its getting reali interesting..soo plz update soon wud make my day. thanxs
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hurray, hurray for Lianna! My first \'hurray\' is because she called Eddie (he\'s so much better for her anyways. I mean aaawww, he got her a present! ^_^) and my second \'hurray\' is because she finally told Joseph off. Yea!
Amazingly emotional chapter! Although, I\'m sure it\'s just beginning of more to come. I think the reason I like this story so much is because you have managed, for me anyway, to make your characters so real, so alive. The scene with Madison reminded me of a friend of mine who would always have \'talks\' with me (the \'you\'re in denial and I\'m going to keep telling you the truth until you break down and cry\' talks -oh, how I LOATHED the \'talks\' ^_^) And the line about Lianna cutting lose and doing the copy boy on the table had me rolling.
So, I hope Joseph gets his head out of his ass (I\'m still holding out for him, although at this point I don\'t know why -I really don\'t want to see him turn out to be a big jerk in the end, no matter how much I cheer for Eddie ^_^ He was just so NICE in the beginning!) and the ending scene with him and Frankie has managed to make me a little nervous. She\'s going to ruin it all, isn\'t she? Oh my god, IS she? ^_^
I would give you criticism (the constructive kind, of course), but I just don\'t feel the need. I think you\'ve got a great thing going here. I\'ve been following your stories since \'Flame and Leah\' and, I think I\'ve said it before, you\'re writing has just grown and matured beautifully since then. And you\'ve been doing exactly what you should to make it keep growing -writing! Just keep going! You\'ve got a great voice, and I\'m so glad you decided to share it with us!
So, since I think this is officially my second longest review on AFF, I will stop with the gushing and the inflation of your ego ^_~ (did I do a good job? oh, I hope so! ^_^) You have me in suspense now and I can\'t WAIT for your next update!
Amazingly emotional chapter! Although, I\'m sure it\'s just beginning of more to come. I think the reason I like this story so much is because you have managed, for me anyway, to make your characters so real, so alive. The scene with Madison reminded me of a friend of mine who would always have \'talks\' with me (the \'you\'re in denial and I\'m going to keep telling you the truth until you break down and cry\' talks -oh, how I LOATHED the \'talks\' ^_^) And the line about Lianna cutting lose and doing the copy boy on the table had me rolling.
So, I hope Joseph gets his head out of his ass (I\'m still holding out for him, although at this point I don\'t know why -I really don\'t want to see him turn out to be a big jerk in the end, no matter how much I cheer for Eddie ^_^ He was just so NICE in the beginning!) and the ending scene with him and Frankie has managed to make me a little nervous. She\'s going to ruin it all, isn\'t she? Oh my god, IS she? ^_^
I would give you criticism (the constructive kind, of course), but I just don\'t feel the need. I think you\'ve got a great thing going here. I\'ve been following your stories since \'Flame and Leah\' and, I think I\'ve said it before, you\'re writing has just grown and matured beautifully since then. And you\'ve been doing exactly what you should to make it keep growing -writing! Just keep going! You\'ve got a great voice, and I\'m so glad you decided to share it with us!
So, since I think this is officially my second longest review on AFF, I will stop with the gushing and the inflation of your ego ^_~ (did I do a good job? oh, I hope so! ^_^) You have me in suspense now and I can\'t WAIT for your next update!