rate_review Reviews

this story contains many key details in battles which enhances the visualization of the actual fighting which is a plus. also has many key characters and the main character who is a loner is also a plus, always interesting to read about a warrior who is not accepted by anyone and how he embarks on his journey through life finding answers. story has potential to be great if it only emphasize and elaborate more on the love connections it hints. hints some romance. should add some sex and nudity. lots of bump and grind with detail plz! GREAT JOB!

O_o Um, yeah, review....

Everything moves at a freakishly fast pace. Can\'t think of anything else. Did you had to stop writing at such a scene... - ___ -

BTW, I think you meant \"rough\", not \"ruff\" (A distinctive collarlike projection around the neck, as of feathers on a bird or of fur on a mammal. -Dictionary.com)

sex scene was too funny. make it slower and make it flow better and sensual.
your attempts to perverseness it alright for a first time. good job so far. make things
flow etetr, and you\'ll be fine.


love and kissies
sam=D

LOL, too many things are rising from the lake. haha LOL john, you made her breast
volumptuous. funny =) hahaha... man... is that what kind of girl you want? (\'cept for
the purple skin?) you had some typos here and there. but it was a pretty good story.
You switch from present to pass tense sometimes, which is kind of odd. The story has
an alright plot. next time, try to split the chapters apart, took me some time to find
where i elft off at. Anyways, good job so far, the story seems to be going alright.


love and kisses =D
Sam

This is interesting. I haven\'t even heard of Warcraft, so I would have thought it was all your own. I did notice two questionable tenses, where a \'d\' might have been dropped but I understood anyway. I hope that you will continue this (after your sleep of course).