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April 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
muy bueno, pero quiero saber que pasa a continuacion, si su pesadilla va a ser real o su maestro de ingles no va hacer nada, ana maria
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December 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. Interesting set up. Now what is she going to do?
Your descriptions of sex scenes could use a bit of work. Right now they mostly read as "he shoved it in her mouth and she sucked it" aka: accident report-esque.
For the sake of an AFF piece it's probably dumb of me to say this but perhaps a bit more insight as to why this "shy virginal high school chick" a cliche of pornish stories decided to write an erotica about a teacher fucking a student FOR A MALE TEACHER. Talk about dumb.
Anyway...I'm interested to see where this is headed.
Your descriptions of sex scenes could use a bit of work. Right now they mostly read as "he shoved it in her mouth and she sucked it" aka: accident report-esque.
For the sake of an AFF piece it's probably dumb of me to say this but perhaps a bit more insight as to why this "shy virginal high school chick" a cliche of pornish stories decided to write an erotica about a teacher fucking a student FOR A MALE TEACHER. Talk about dumb.
Anyway...I'm interested to see where this is headed.
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice concept, but more detail would have been appreciated.
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was so funny! I expected it to be a romance, like so many people overdo.
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was just a dream? Oh, well, it\'ll be really interesting to see how she\'s going to squirm her way out of it now. Will she succeed, or will it be worse than the premonition? (dun dun dun) Hehe. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I wish I could say I was as anxious about this story as everyone else seems to be, but I think you still have a lot of work to do. The concept is great, and I won\'t deny it\'s the type of thing I read about, but I also think the detail isn\'t really there and it could use a little more style to it. You started off stronger, but as you go through the chapters you are petering off. More description of it all would be nice, more motive for the men to rape her, or for her to have written it. This isn\'t awful, it\'s just my few suggestions.
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Before I read this, I always wondered: \"Why don\'t I put sex/death/etc in my assignment for class?\" And now I know why. Haha, seriously though, this is a nice story. Keep up the good work.
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Isn\'t someone going to save her. :(
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, what a good idea! I liked it alot, except I dont think its done. The thing didn\'t really end dearie. I liked it and hey, it got me off....You are a good writer, so don\'t stop, and please finish this one. I gave it an A- Bravo!
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story\'s great and I have an idea. You should make start accepting what she\'s getting and get turned enough to start begging to take the handcuffs and they do it and she starts enjoying it and love it. I hope you listen to this and consider it.But this is your story so do what you want,but you\'d probably get more reviews. I\'m just saying. Peace.